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[d15k0zach]

Swollen raindrops further wet your misty-eyed stare as you reach two hands behind a neck too pretty to ignore and unclasp the necklace. I swear that over the wet handclaps of the storm, I can hear the silver chain scraping against itself as you let the trinket fall into my palm. It sounds like desperation

Comments

[tifroc]

Imagery is your forte.

[underknownprsn]

the words are great, but I want some more story with it. I think that's just because it's only an opening paragraph though.

[d15k0zach]

I try to write moments more than stories. Very vignette-y ideas that you can relate to in your own specific way. I aim for 'open'.

[underknownprsn]

then balls to the wall you've very much succeeded, and knowing that I enjoy it very much :D

[tifroc]

I know what you mean. I love the words. In the same way I enjoy a poem that is open-ended.