fic: her whip, of cricket's bone

[ghostinsweats]

her whip, of cricket's bone.

shakespeare (romeo and juliet). girl!mercutio. girl!mercutio/romeo. r. "you're not persistent enough," she whispers, her legs twisting around him, queen mab herself. 887 words.
notes: this is kind of shitty. what even. i don't know what this is.

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[ext_862864]

I'm ridiculously impressed by this- thank you for writing it. :] Found it off tumblr, btw.

You've portrayed their relationship in a stunning way and kept Mercutio's personality intact and radiant. The dialogue, especially, is well thought-out. Story itself is authentic and entertaining. And the atmosphere, yes. And I adore how you've touched on his [her?] death- it's seamless brilliance and leaves that bittersweet note.

Do you have any more R & J fics?

[mind_conundrum]

[lizzie_marie_23]

This is fantastic. I love how well you acknowledge that this is a play but that it doesn't interfere with the story itself. There's nothing in this that doesn't make me really happy.

Probably one of my favorite lines is this:
The girl is a living anomaly. No surprise they have to kill her halfway through the play. It's so pretty and sad and beautiful.