I thought this was great! Hooray for Vila learning to trust himself in a crisis. And the weapon in the wound - ouch! I winced! Poor Avon - how I love him to suffer. *is mean*
There's a all typo here: '"Serves you right for getting mixed up with the feds, he?"
I think you want Vila to be making a sound like "Eh?" or "Heh?" - both don't commonly heard in speech to mean 'Don't you?' or 'isn't it?' - but 'he' reads as the pronoun, and is therfore a little confusing.
Of course! I'd only feel confident doing B7 stuff, though. I'll send you my email address.
And if I ever get a bit snowed under at Uni and find I can't, you can put out a call on b7fic. I did that for my first story (an A/C) and people were LOVELY.
Thanks...and don't worry. I'm usually a slow writer with periods of no writing at all. But sometimes it's just nice to be able to ask someone about a word or phrase you're unsure about. Today for instance. I was sure that when I was young (which is a very long time ago) I learned that the verb tenses for leap were: leap - lept - lept. The spell check didn't accept this of course and I went out on the internet where I found the proper spelling, but was told it was pronounced as 'lept'. Well, there you have it. You English fanfic writers are so lucky: being able to write in the language you grew up with! I envy you. Thanks for wanting to beta! I won't pester you all the time, I promise!
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*is mean*
There's a all typo here: '"Serves you right for getting mixed up with the feds, he?"
I think you want Vila to be making a sound like "Eh?" or "Heh?" - both don't commonly heard in speech to mean 'Don't you?' or 'isn't it?' - but 'he' reads as the pronoun, and is therfore a little confusing.
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Are you interested in beta reading for me once in a while?
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And if I ever get a bit snowed under at Uni and find I can't, you can put out a call on b7fic. I did that for my first story (an A/C) and people were LOVELY.
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Today for instance. I was sure that when I was young (which is a very long time ago) I learned that the verb tenses for leap were: leap - lept - lept. The spell check didn't accept this of course and I went out on the internet where I found the proper spelling, but was told it was pronounced as 'lept'.
Well, there you have it. You English fanfic writers are so lucky: being able to write in the language you grew up with! I envy you.
Thanks for wanting to beta! I won't pester you all the time, I promise!
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