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silberstreif September 3 2012, 01:40:16 UTC
Well Prowl, you certainly know how to leave lasting impressions. ^-^ I was laughing when Prowl finally realised WHO he had been seducing in front of a crowd (it sounds as if Prowl himself might be now a shooting star among the single mechs) and is now courting... Smokescreen sounds certainly proud of his brother.
(And what was this about Sentinel and a sparkling?)
I like what you did with the colour black, and how Firestar talked about it and the courting gift... And "something to talk about" - well, yes. That's definitely something.

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gilded_orchid September 3 2012, 07:05:46 UTC
*grins* I'm painting Protihex to be a sort of mash of Hollywood/New Orleans/Old World Venice, and scandal/gossip are practically art forms in and of themselves in those societies. Poor Prowl never had a chance once his name got thrown out there. Sentinel's and the sparkling thing...I don't know where it came from. I might leave it as a one-off joke just to show how absurd the gossip mill can get, but I'm also kinda envisioning plot lines to certain Autobots *cough*Hot Rod*cough*.

Thanks for the read and review! ^__^

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bluebirdsoaring September 3 2012, 02:59:13 UTC
Poor Prowl getting himself in the middle of a mess and not even realizing it...but it sounds like a delicious mess if I do say so myself!! I had to giggle at the unique take you have on the "painting" process...that would be too much for me to sit through! I do love this for your world building and I look forward to the whole epic you have planned

All the whole while, Jazz is just having fun with it...last line is pure gold =)

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gilded_orchid September 3 2012, 07:17:50 UTC
It definitely wasn't fair on Prowl, but hey. He's smart; he knows how to roll with the punches. ^_~

Glad you liked the splashes of world building! The painting process is a bit too much, isn't it? On one hand, I wanted to show how much art/craftsmanship is Serious Business in Protihex because I'm going to play around with the concept of Protihex as a city of guilds/artisans, but I also wanted it to be a bit absurd because this is pre-war Cybertron, and the most common complaint of that era is unnecessary excess. Well, that and insane levels of corruption and social stagnation, but I don't know how far I'm going to wander in that direction.

Thanks for the read and review!

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wicked3659 September 3 2012, 07:53:42 UTC
This was brilliant! Positively charming and fun and made me smile on a monday!! :D Very original, looking forward to more! :3

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gilded_orchid September 3 2012, 17:09:37 UTC
High praise indeed! I'm glad to have brightened a Monday for you! ^_^

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whitefirebird September 3 2012, 11:08:01 UTC
Prowl is just precious in this. And Smokescreen's conversation with him, omg rofl. And Jazz *flails* So good!

I love this, and am very much looking forward to any continuations.

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gilded_orchid September 3 2012, 17:11:01 UTC
I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm actually looking forward to writing more of this, too. ^__^

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camfield September 3 2012, 15:34:33 UTC
I AM INTRIGUED!!!

I love this, seriously. Prowl is like, wut? And then Smokes is like, BAWWWW! And then Jazz is like, HHHMMMmmmmm.

So awesome.

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gilded_orchid September 3 2012, 17:13:39 UTC
That...that is eerily reminiscent of my thought process when I escaped the plot!bunny stampede.... ^_~

Glad you liked it!

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