Comments | gilded_orchid: Camaraderie: The Secret-Keeper: 1/4

gilded_orchid

Camaraderie: The Secret-Keeper: 1/4

Sep 03, 2013 20:04

Title: Camaraderie: The Secret-Keeper: Part 1/4
Universe: Alignment/IDW AU, Camaraderie/Trinkets 'verse
Rating: PG-13, to be on the safe side
Characters: Jazz, Prowl, various Autobot Officers, Megatron.
Prompt: Red glow reflected in your eyes
Warning: woefully unbeta'd mentions of violence (semi-graphic), mentions of death, angst, bad bots doing bad ( Read more... )

fan fiction: 2013, anniversary challenge 2013, tf-wfc, anniversary challenge 13, au, multi-chapter, rated pg-13, angst, prowlxjazz: 13

Comments 22

kkcliffy September 4 2013, 03:53:00 UTC

Ohmygoodness!!!! The end made me cry. You did a wonderful job describing what Prowl is going through at every obstacle that he comes across. At least he has Jazz there to help keep things from being even worse.

gilded_orchid September 4 2013, 23:31:50 UTC

Awww....I didn't mean to yank out tears, but I'm glad it impacted the right way?

.......I think that comment officially makes me a horrible person. x__x

And yeah, Jazz is a major life-saver. Probably literally, at that!

Thanks so much for the review!

kkcliffy September 5 2013, 00:46:48 UTC

No, not a horrible person. Just a good writer. You have to be good to bring out the right emotions in your readers.

sakon76 September 4 2013, 04:22:49 UTC

Oh. Wow. This is incredible writing! I can't wait to read the other parts. This was fantastic!

gilded_orchid September 4 2013, 23:33:41 UTC

High praise, indeed! I'm glad you're enjoying it--I was worried it would come across as a crappy angst-fest, but I'm hoping I avoided it. We'll see how well the other parts go ^__^

whitefirebird September 4 2013, 04:30:03 UTC

Oh. My. God.

I'm sitting here with an aching heart, and suddenly terrified.
Because when someone is pushed that far there is no telling what will happen, what they're capable of. And the consequences are huge, the impact deep, and all of it far reaching.

Prowl. Scared for him, scared of what he'll do.

gilded_orchid September 4 2013, 23:35:31 UTC

Nailed where I'm headed, you did.

I'm sorry for the heartache though? *has got to shake this angst muse loose*

bluebirdsoaring September 4 2013, 05:05:04 UTC

Wow, I'm dying a little just reading about the agony Prowl was living through - the burning of everything alive in Praxis is the most powerful word image I've ever seen from this part of the war.

He tried so hard, he had all of the plans made, hundreds of them, and yet he watched them fall one by one. And the outcome on his own people was a nightmare beyond anything he could have ever imagined!!! The bit about Jazz standing by him in spite of what a wise man would do, and the last line about the dripping of his own energon...heartbreaking!!!

Amazing and epic piece of fiction you have right here!!

gilded_orchid September 4 2013, 23:42:23 UTC

Thanks so much! I hadn't planned to go so dark with Praxus' fate, but I couldn't shake the idea once it struck. I'm in this odd place where I'm glad it's having the impact I want, but still...dangit. x__x

I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! Hopefully I can get the next part to come out just as well!

wicked3659 September 4 2013, 07:25:37 UTC

Really really well done. Prowl's rage is palpable and understandably so. It's a good thing Jazz doesn't leave his side I feel.

gilded_orchid September 4 2013, 23:44:45 UTC

Wow, thanks! I'm glad I was able to get Prowl's dilemma to come across so well; the muse was not helpful in that regard. And yeah, Jazz is definitely the only thing keeping Prowl from going haywire. But I'm exploring that more in the next part, so I'll shut up now before I spoil things. ^__^