Darkness

[ginasfslove]

Title: Darkness
Pairing: Pete/Patrick
Rating: NC-17 (Oh what do you think?)
Summary: Patrick was shooting the scene for L&O. Pete got horny. Patrick got hungry. Pete and Patrick get photographed by photog, Ryan, while sexing each other up, oh yay.

Disclaimer: Really, have you ever seen those pictures?
Word count: 2,126

Comments

[pyraterose]

just a quick note before I finish reading. I'm kinda strange, but I used this scene in one of my fics once so I thought I'd let you know...

it's "there's evidence you hacked into Conlan's emails, voicemails, pictures of his house, his family." :) *goes to finish*

[pyraterose]

Ooo that was hot :) melikey :)
oh and another script thing

"maybe he kicked Marty's ass and told him to hop to." :)

I can't tell you how many times I've watched that episode. Like, Patrick killed me dead with the whole sexy kidnapper/murderer thing. *melts* I absolutely love fic about the whole thing. Kudos ^_^ <3!

[ginasfslove]

i dont know. hahaha my volumes pretty much completely fucked over on my computer so i tried. :] thank you, i hope you enjoyed it. but i have a question here: is there a problem that we have the same storyline? cause i'm sorry if it is. i didn't copy you if you think that, just for the record. :]

[pyraterose]

No no it's not the same storyline at all. I'm acutally working on a fic set in the law and order verse. Like, about Marty Dressler and having nothing to do with Fall Out Boy at all. :)

[emorockkid]

This was definitely something different from the things I read usually.
It was kind of exciting, but also a bit hard to read. You use a lot of speech and that sometimes causing a lack of description so that the reader has to go back and read over it again.

Nice idea to let Ryan be the Paprazzi and even if the last part sounded a bit hectic, I liked the the last few phrases about doing those things at home where everything is save.

Nice stuff all in all

[ginasfslove]

yeah, i know. like i said, i wrote this quickly, right before bed so i could get the idea out and not lose part of the essence over night so really, i wasn't trying for great grammar or anything. unfortunately, i forgot that it still needed perfecting in the morning and by the time i'd posted it here and to the community, i realized some of the errors. so i've been waiting it out and hoping there weren't any major errors, and possibly if there were, readers would point it out. thank you for your critique and i will definitely take into consideration all of your (and others') advice for my next fic. really, that one will be about rape so there will be hardly any need for talking, maybe just a few phrases here and there. once again thank you, and sorry about my rambling in this comment. :]

[elessar]

I have a few things...both good (praise) and bad (crit) so I'll start with the bad first and work my way up to the good

[ginasfslove]

thank you very much for the advice. just got the idea and wasn't really paying attention to the grammar but thank you for pointing it out. i guess i really can see how it would get confusing. cool. i'll work on it.

[hurtstoloveyou]

nargle.
AWESOME!

[ginasfslove]

thank youuuu. by the way, just wanted to tell you ive been really into your ficlets. theyre pretty awesomely written, especially for something so short. i <3 [insert your name, fics name, or anything that has to do with in general] :]

[hurtstoloveyou]

thanks bunches. i really like your stories!!!!!!
i luff em so much i cannot put em into words, sooo...
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[ginasfslove]

aw youre so cool!

[eyerenderingfan]

I thought the end was more like a happily ever after thing
I wouldn't say it was cheesy at all no :P

They all lived happily with their blowjobs XD

[ginasfslove]

haha sweet. yeah, even if you were a straight man, who wouldn't get like eternally high off a Patrick and Pete bj? especially the Patrick one? 0:]