Sometimes It Goes the Other Way

[glaenconer]

Ennis found a beer and a place in a corner and folded in on himself to watch the fellas shoot pool.  A buck-toothed b-girl joined them, smiling big and laughing loud, leaning her shelfy chest on the table, drinking from everybody’s cup, and generally making herself available.  Roy pointed her in Ennis’s direction, letting on that the boy needed

Comments

[anonymous]

Glad to find this story. Your writing style is unique and I like it.

Loved that ending. I can see Jack strolling in and saying just those words - very Jack! Gotta say, though, I can't picture Ennis edging away and retreating from any fight - no matter how outnumbered. But it made for some fine drama.

I am SOOOO jealous . . .

[cynical21]

. . . that I will never in my life be able to write so concisely, and tell such a vivid story in such deliciously minimalist fashion.

I'm reminded of Cassie's comment to Junior, in the film: "You don't say much, but you get your point across."

I'm loving every word.

CYN

[sienata]

Whew!!! Timing is everything!! Yayayay for Jack! Can't wait to read more. This is quite captivating! S!

Way

[greatmtn]

Glaenconner, have to agree with what Cynical said about you getting the point across with your short stories.
Really good work.

thanks

greatmtn

[rainattimes]

my darlin' Ennis, no social skills, no way out of a rough situation except fists, Jack the charmer, the thinker, the savior, this was an exceptionally excellent chapter. thank you.