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bobojaj June 7 2008, 22:05:21 UTC
Ooh, that was fantastically dirty. Absolutely loved the ending line, and the awesome use of weather. Dirty sex in a thunderstorm? Me likes. Nice job!

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glasssubway June 8 2008, 15:32:38 UTC
Why, thank you very much! I just think Squalo + Yama follows logically to dirty outdoor sex :P

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questofdreams June 7 2008, 23:42:33 UTC
*__* oh wow... that was wicked. MMMM Squalo was amazing :3

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glasssubway June 8 2008, 15:34:28 UTC
Hey, you did comment! LOL All random IM moments last night aside...

Glad you liked it! Even if it was written by such a young'un as me XD

I will spend the rest of my day laughing at this inconceivable difference in age and life experience...

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dame_batsie June 8 2008, 01:24:18 UTC
Squalo x Yama! WHEEEE! I love it. And the last sentence.

During the alleyway fucking in the rain (which is hawt), I was expecting Yama's dad to walk in on them. And then I read on, only to find out that there's no message and then I yell, "Arrrgh!".

To which my sister comes into my room and asks, "What?"

And I tell her, "Squalo had sex with Yama without a message."

She gives me a look and says, "You read too much fanfiction."

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glasssubway June 8 2008, 15:36:43 UTC
Squalo would never play messenger boy! It is not Squalo-esque! HAHA you and your sister

Epilogue:
Yamamoto is lying in the alleyway without his pants when his father comes out the door.

"Dad," he says, trying to come up with a really good excuse for his nakedness and failing miserably.

Yamamoto's dad looks at him for a long moment.

"Takeshi," he says gravely. "I think it's time you and I had a little conversation about the bees and the...er...bees..."

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cleartempest June 9 2008, 02:59:13 UTC
AHAHAHA. XDD I laughed ZOMG. But he could just be getting himself off...

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dame_batsie June 9 2008, 20:55:37 UTC
Ha ha...I wonder if his dad is going to speak from actual experience?

SCANDAL OF THE CENTURY!

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grenville June 8 2008, 04:46:13 UTC
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@_@ THANK YOU. <333333333 I had an epic nosebleed all over the keyboard. This is perfect. Made my night. (And your Yamamoto is lovely! You shouldn't worry about that. And you Squalo... "I'm not fucking in this for you." Arrrrgh. Too lovely.)

(And thanks for the message, too. <3 I think I will write about you all. You're too crazy not to. Andrew, for example, got Josh the movie "Snoop Dogg's Hood of Horrors" for his birthday. We ROFLled.)

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glasssubway June 8 2008, 15:38:05 UTC
I win. End of story! *rushes to nearest mountain to proclaim superiority to the world*

(OMG, THAT'S AMAZING! Pablo gave me strawberry-daiquiris-in-a-bag for my birthday last year)

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mujakinotsubasa June 8 2008, 05:41:36 UTC
The only thing I feel kinda off about this is the pace. It didn't feel natural to me, for some reason. Kinda choppy and rushed. Maybe it's what you intended it to sound like, and if it were, then ignore me <3

Otherwise, it was hot :3 Sex in the rain is yummy, plus it's Yamamoto and Squalo, so it fits perfectly.

Also, love the last line XD ♥

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glasssubway June 8 2008, 15:38:52 UTC
Yeah, no, pacing probably fails. That's what happens when you write during a children's movie.

Last line was the whole point of the story XD

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mujakinotsubasa June 8 2008, 15:42:09 UTC
Ahahaha XD [pets] it's okay! I still like it nonetheless~

Last line was absolutely perfect, and it made me lol XD

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