a poem

[gloomanddoom]

here's a poem i just wrote i think its' good but im not sure

next thing i will post it in one of those poetry commnities to see what people think but i hope they like it i am sensitive about my poety...also i hope no 1 plagarizes it so here goes:

DEATH

once upon a time there wasa a princes

in hell who  wore a black dress

she was a gothic princess

Comments

[xxmorbidxxmexx]

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[gloomanddoom]

how pretty!!! i like the flowers they made me cry a little because they were so nice u r the only person nice to me in the whole world i think!!!!

wait a minute i just thought of something bad, r u making fun of me are the flowers a joke if thats true its real real mean & ill cry now AGAN!!!!!!!

[xxmorbidxxmexx]

know

i was being synseer

[gloomanddoom]

awwww iluvu to then!!

[rbitraryblcknss]

i don't rilly no what to say prolly cos i only read the lsat 2 lines but um its pretty good

[gloomanddoom]

how come u only read the end is that caus im so bad im the worst & u just knew it wuld be terible or caus u don’t like poems & this's a poem about sucide I thought u liked poems about death and sadness u like sylvia plat right?????? i lov <3 syvvy plath!!!

[blackphoenix524]

It's a good poem, I like it :) A little depressing, yes, but then it reflects the world these days well.

[gloomanddoom]

thanx! i fell so happy! it does show the world today realy caus the world realy sucx today. especially caus sorrow & people hating everything & being rejected & drowned prostutes only happens now i dont think it happened in the past. only since i was born becaus my life sucks.

[blackphoenix524]

Oh it most certainly happened in the past, indeed things were a lot worse in the past :) However these days people are a lot more aware of it and there's a lot more media exposure of world suffering.

[gloomanddoom]

i think people always knew they just never cared cause people are selfish like my mom always tells me but realy shes selfish caus she wants every1 to be PERFEC!!!

[cathycg]

Your poem is great, though sad. you take care always!!

[gloomanddoom]

thanx :) i just started writin poetry so its not very good but i hope i wil get beter!!!

wow

[audiebaby_16]

i really like this poem..i actually feel like dying sometimes also..you are very emotional with your poetry and i like that, you express a lot through it..i like it

Re: wow

[gloomanddoom]

thanx u :)