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goddess_of_7s

Fic: Far Too Human 2/?

Feb 10, 2007 19:13

Okay guys I'm riding my writing high for as long as it will take me, these chapters seem a little short, would you guys rather have frequent updates and shorter chapters or longer chapters with more time between ( Read more... )

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goddess_of_7s February 10 2007, 12:28:17 UTC

Thanks!

melodyunity February 10 2007, 03:00:48 UTC

The team sat around like beads fallen from a broken necklace, laying where ever they landed.

Oooh, nice image!

No psyhc.

Whoops! Typo! Should be "psych."

The ending, from Reid's point of view, was just...aw, man, poor guy! So creepy and so, so sad. ::wibble::

goddess_of_7s February 10 2007, 12:29:50 UTC

Yeah. Did you pick on the others? I mention like three other things broken. Total theme for this chapter. Fixed the typo in my draft, but I don't think I'm going to bother with the lj. Thanks for pointing it out though!

authenticity February 10 2007, 17:11:05 UTC

Again, I'm loving this! Great job!
♥!!

goddess_of_7s February 10 2007, 22:46:50 UTC

Thanks!

npetrenko February 10 2007, 21:45:29 UTC

Great story. Please write more!

goddess_of_7s February 10 2007, 22:47:07 UTC

working on it! ;0

polgarawolf February 12 2007, 05:35:22 UTC

Gideon had better get him out of there. That's all I have to say about that. Reid doesn't need to be in a place like that after all he's gone through.

And the death/broken/destruction imagery in this is pretty darn consistently borderline-disturbing and brilliant. Gaze like a furnace, cancer of the soul, broken mold, sleeping with (an angle that suggests) a broken neck, sleeping askwew and awkward, like one dead, teammates scattered like beads from a broken necklace, the list just goes on!

goddess_of_7s February 12 2007, 17:12:21 UTC

*claps* Yes thank you! I was actually just talking about this phenomenon with my mother. I've been having to analyze quite a bit of poetry recently and I was saying how I didn't think that a writer sat down with a list or plan of all the metaphors or descriptions in their work. I think they sit down with a vague idea and they instinctively write things that other people then have to break down and quantify. Now what does that have to do with what you just said? I specifically used the word broken quite a bit, but some of the images that you mention--cancer of the soul--I didn't plan..it just felt appropriate for the mood of the story. Anyway I know that was bit of a rant, but sometimes the complete breakdown of a poem not individual sylables really bothers me. Cant' it just be a work full of emotion and something to enjoy and move you?

polgarawolf February 13 2007, 03:18:23 UTC

*Lol!* I know what you mean. And it's very hard to plan out poetry that meticulously and still end up with a product that can genuinely move people, so I think it's entirely likely that most poetry is a mix of the deliberate and whatever most feels right at that particular moment in time.