Hmm... I kind of like where this is going, but in many ways I am intensely confusilated. So Nylar is doing all of Sylar!Nathan's public appearances? But wouldn't that, by definition, put him right back into the line of fire? Public functions are perhaps the most dangerous for famous figures, as there are so many ways for people to get at them. This would seem to be the opposite of being able to keep Nylar safe
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There will be answers I promise you that and I am very, very thankful for the nitpicky type feedback. Really I am it makes me a much better writer and makes future chapters better as well.
I had a different ending for this chapter in mind when I wrote it which is why I am not happy with this one, but the original chapter wouldn't have worked either for the reasons you cited. Dewitt is in my mind very cocky which is why she's going against what Angela originally wanted, however this will come back and bite her later in terms of Nylar's memories, Paul and Alpha.
Unlike the Heroes writers I try to have payoff when I set something up! Thank you so much for the feedback thought, you are one of my favorite writers and it means the world to me that you are taking the time out to tell me what needs to be fixed.
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I am so happy that the ending seems to be working.
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I had a different ending for this chapter in mind when I wrote it which is why I am not happy with this one, but the original chapter wouldn't have worked either for the reasons you cited. Dewitt is in my mind very cocky which is why she's going against what Angela originally wanted, however this will come back and bite her later in terms of Nylar's memories, Paul and Alpha.
Unlike the Heroes writers I try to have payoff when I set something up! Thank you so much for the feedback thought, you are one of my favorite writers and it means the world to me that you are taking the time out to tell me what needs to be fixed.
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