i really like the last verse, but i'm not sure if it needs to be repeated twice. the 7th verse (a little bit of the 5th too) seems to break up the flow of the entire work with direct questions; perhaps it could work better in the beginning or end? i hope you don't mind a little crit., but please feel free to be critical of mine (as long as it is constructive of course). =)
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