Lets Bring in the New Year! Chapter Two

[golden_reverie]

Second chapter’s up! Introducing Adam and Sharon in this chapter...and that's all you'll be seeing of them in this story, I'm afraid. The story’s picking up though…if you didn’t like it, don’t worry because it’s going to get better, I promise. I’d love any feed back or critism, I especially love reviews/comments :)

Chapter 2: An Unexpected Visitor

Comments

[xilvrin]

It's cute so far, but it's a bit OVER-described. It's ok to call eyes: eyes, even if they are mentioned multiple times, rather than orbs and pupils and such.

[golden_reverie]

Oh thanks for your feedback...I was trying to be descriptive because if not, I thought it would have been repetitive.