WOUNDED SOLDIER

[goodfellow101]

HEY YA'LL I JUST DECIDED TO WRITE ONE OF MY OWNS POEMS/SONG BUT BE SURE TO TELL ME HOW YOU LIKE IT OK THATS ALL FOLKS.........

IN THIS WORLD IM IN

MAN THIS WORLD OF SIN

YOU SEE,SPIRITUALLY IM FIGHTING WITHIN

I TRY TO KICK I TRY TO STOP THAT BESETTING SIN

BUT WHAT DRIVES ME TO WIN IS THE VICTORY IN THE END

JESUS HES THE ONE WHO DIED FOR OUR

Comments

[emmaausten7]

"I can't be a Saint dropout and say that I tried, cause they faith is washed up like the ocean's tide."

I really liked that line! It is a cool comparision.

The whole poem is kind of a mismatch of everyday Christian experience; everything that we feel and go through just trying to walk with God and run the race.

Good job.

[4ft2nat_nat]

thats good! it keeps you interested. it kinda goes from one thing to another in the same sentence so you have to transition fast. its cool. i like the recycling bin part. i felt like someone had written it for me. i could really relate. you might want to check the spelling on a few words. over all though it was good!!

HEY

[goodfellow101]

HAHAH I TOLD YOU I WOULD WRITE SOMETHING HOTT!!NAH BUT IM GLAD YOU LIKE IT. I PLAN TO DO THT FOR FRI.NITE YOUTH SOME TIME. I WAS TALKING TO JESSICA AND I THINK IT WOULD BE GOOD FOR ALOT OF PPL WHO WRITE POETRY AN STUFF TO DO IT FOR FRI.YOUTH.....YEA LIKE A STAND UP POETRY NIGHT TYPE THING IT WILL GIVE CERTAIN PPL A CHANCE TO EXPRESS HOW THEY FEEL.I WROTE THAT BECAUSE THATS TRUE THATS WHAT I WAS GOING THROUGH AND AND NOT JUST ME I BELIEVE WE ALL GO THROUGH TIMES LIKE THAT BUT IN DIFFERENT WAYS.. THATS WHY ITS IMPORTANT TO ENCOURAGE ONE ANOTHER OR AT LEAST PRAY FOR ONE ANOTHER YOU KNOW THERES DIFFERENT WAYS TO ENCOURAGE SOMEONE FOR ex. WHAT I WROTE COULD HAVE BEEN AN ENCOURAGEMENT TO YOU OR TO SOMEONE ELSE..I HAD ONE PERSON SAY THEY LIKED THE WHOLE SAINT DROPOUT PART(I CAN'T BE A SAINT DROPOUT AND SAY THAT I TRIED..... CAUSE THEY FAITH IS WASHED UP LIKE THE OCEAN'S TIDE)YEA THE WORDS I MEANT TO LEAVE THEM LIKE THT I JUST WANTED A GHETTO TWIST TO IT BUT I GOTS TO GO AGAIN GLAD YOU ENJOYED IT...............

[___thatswhy]

wow, that is seriously amazing.

HEY

[goodfellow101]

HEY THANKS NEXT TIME YOU SHOULD WRITE ONE!!!

[lilynthavally]

hey randy awesome poem!!!!!!!

[upc_rosie]

I like! ;-)