FIC: The Touch of Your Hand

Aug 21, 2007 12:38

Title: The Touch of Your Hand
Author: mosaic
Prompt: Apple - The apple tree represents youth, beauty, and love. It features in most major myths as the fruit that keeps the gods young/immortal. Its juice can be used to infer strength and beauty. It is commonly used for spells regarding love and healing.
Rating: PG
Warning: DH-compliant (except for the ( Read more... )

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pinkelephant42 September 25 2007, 16:47:16 UTC
You've taken two very humble and caring personalities and built such a sweet fic that is very Neville/Luna. <3

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mosaic September 25 2007, 17:53:31 UTC
*blush* Thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this fic, so I'm glad you liked it!

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molly_coddles September 26 2007, 02:32:45 UTC
Luna unbuttoned his filthy work shirt and pushed it off his shoulders

Ah, the images are lovely! ;)

Delightful fic!

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mosaic September 26 2007, 02:41:31 UTC
Thank you so much! I'm thrilled you liked it!

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pixychelle October 1 2007, 20:25:18 UTC
(Apologies for the lateness of the comment. I'm attempting to catch up with r&r on the challenge entries at least while I have a moment of downtime... well, you're on my f-list, you know the deal ( ... )

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mosaic October 1 2007, 20:49:42 UTC
I thought that omniscient point of view was defined as getting into the minds of all characters as opposed to just one character. That's what I tried to do here, but I don't have as much practice with it as I do with limited POV. I definitely see what you mean, but I suppose it's not jarring to me as the author. Thank you for your concrit! I'll keep it in mind if/when I try omniscient POV again.

I'm so glad you liked the fic! It was really fun to write.

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pixychelle October 1 2007, 21:50:42 UTC
It's a quibble, but omniscient is actually the story told from a narrator (generally just the author, not a particular character, though that can be done as well) who knows all (hence "omniscient"). It's an *outside* PoV, though the narrator may know what all of the characters are thinking/feeling/etc. Perhaps I could have been more clear: in this piece, I definitely felt that we were stepping into the characters' shoes (and in the proper PoV, that's a very good thing), but did not have the sense of looking in on them from the outside, nor did it leave the impression that the story was being told from either Neville or Luna's PoV and they were the omniscient narrator. That may very well be my subjective impression and everyone else saw a third narrator out there, so grain of salt and all ( ... )

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mosaic October 1 2007, 22:05:41 UTC
It's good to hear the way people read it, though, since I'm subjective as the author. However, I was trying to give it the feel of an outside, omniscient narrator telling the story of these two, but you said it "did not have the sense of looking in on them from the outside." Any ideas on how I could make that distinction more clear next time around?

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sabella_black00 March 24 2008, 23:29:34 UTC
I lovelovelove!! your Neville.

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mosaic March 24 2008, 23:32:34 UTC
Thank you so much!!!

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