Fic: Off the Stage (8/14)

[gradgirl_07]

Title: Off the Stage (8/14)

Author: gradgirl (aka Ali)

Rating: PG-13 (eventually NC-17)

Characters/Pairings: Van Hansis/Eric Sheffer Stevens

Summary: Future fic. What happens off the stage when Van and Eric meet again?

Warnings: RPS. If you are offended by the idea, please do not read this story.

Disclaimer: Complete fabrication, never happened, never

Comments

[ltklo]

Another great chapter. I like your addition of Teri. It's a great bridge between Van and ESS plus she's terrific as someone for ESS to express his feelings to.

“The director noted that in our last rehearsal…” the tapping continued and Terri waited patiently. “Well the scene came across a little too familiar and a lot less…familial.”

Terri laughed and Eric found himself chuckling in return. “So you were all eye-sex with each other or something?” she asked nonchalantly.

It's rather fun that both Van and ESS are overthinking everything. It gives us a really interest look into their emotions.

“What if…” He leaned over, catching Terri’s gaze. “What if I hurt him the way I hurt Christopher? I couldn’t do that to Van.”

“Just don’t hurt yourself in the process.”

I think they both have a huge crush on each other. I won't go so far as to say "love" because they still seem to be giddy and uncertain.

Again, I must express my enjoyment of all the little "touches".

[gradgirl_07]

I really liked what you said about Terri, I think that was the plan for her role in this. They are over-thinking, we'll have to see what happens when they just act. ;-) Yeah, I'm not sure if I would call it love yet... And the "touches" will continue, I think touch ends up becoming very important in these next few chapters. Thank you again for such lovely comments. ~Ali

[ganeshalemming]

In the flashback, there's a tension in poor Van that seems to mirror what Eric's feeling in the present... I would like to see what happens when they don't feel the need to hold themselves back like that anymore. No more half-sentences. :)

[gradgirl_07]

I really really love your comment. The flashbacks are in a way to act as a mirror and I'm so grateful you picked up on it. The half-sentences... We'll see if they can actually start talking. Thank you! ~Ali

[jem_018]

I loved that you included Terri here.

I think Eric is such a goner for Van. :P

I'm really curious as to what happened with this Christopher person.

Loved the flashback.

lovely chapter. :D

[gradgirl_07]

Thank you! :-) I'm glad you liked Terri. Eric is feeling a lot, for sure, I like how you called him a "goner." We'll see some of Christopher and Eric's relationship. ~Ali

[theshahofblah]

I would love to see some back story on Christopher and Eric too, so a great bit YAY! to that!

Eric needs to embrace his gay-dom. :D

[gradgirl_07]

We will definitely learn more about this Christopher and his relationship with Eric. ~Ali

[sripley]

TERRI! ah! this is so exciting!
i ADORE the idea that these two at least HAVE kept in touch!
ahhhh! *flails*

lol aww. drunk!eric trying to kiss teri. oh my.
wonder how austin felt about that? lol <3

"And do you have on on him now?"
GO TERRI.

AH! that was as good as a YES!
*flails*

*

ooo interesting conversation
about what nate knows & doesn't know.

lovely <3

[gradgirl_07]

Again, I love your comments. Glad you liked the addition of Terri (and I almost included Austin, but decided against it). I'm not sure that Austin was too receptive when he found out...
Cherimola (I think) would remind me that Terri was often the voice of the reader so she was fun to include. Glad you liked the convo in the flashback, I think I focused more on Van's touching. Thank you! ~Ali

[theshahofblah]

I loved that Eric had an early coffee with Terri and very delicately mentioned his interest in Van. The fact that he admits to being afraid he'll hurt him like he did Christopher reveals he might be further along than he realises. Or is maybe now starting to realise. Speaking from personal experience, I can safely say that once you start saying stuff like this out loud there is no turning back.

My only 'complaint' is that the part in the 'now' was too short. ;)
I still find that the story in the 'now' strong enough to stand on its own without the flashbacks. I would prefer to be kept guessing and wondering about the Lure period. I know you'll keep the flashbacks in because that's the structure you chose, I just hope you don't mind my saying this because I actually mean it as a compliment about the post-Lure story.

Love, A.

[gradgirl_07]

Yeah, I don't know that Eric is full aware of what he's feeling, once he does... Hope everyone likes it. :-) And the guys will reach certain points of no return and have to figure out what to do after that. I noticed the present in this chapter was much shorter than usual. Generally the flashbacks aren't this long I believe the upcoming chapters will be longer in regards to the present. And I guess you could always skip the flashbacks but there is one involving Christopher you might want to read.

Thank you! ~Ali

[theshahofblah]

Not to worry, I'm ready it all. :)

And I'm sure we're going to love when they reach their points of no return and when Eric gets the big whammy. ;)

[gradgirl_07]

I loved what you said about Eric and the whammy. But I think Van gets one first. ;-) ~Ali