Title: There is no key. Summary: She was the only person he saw that night. Turns out, he was the only person blessed enough to see her
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AGHH! SORRY! That comment was just a suggestion ;__; (Or was it not me? LOLOL /remembers giving that POV comment)
But I actually like this better. It's clearer, and I could follow the story more. I'm not sure what the others would think, though!
Weeks pass, and he’d decide- he was in love with a ghost, actually, a lost soul - a French noble stuck in her hideout in America, still running away from the chaos of the French Revolution.
I tried to address all the judges' comments. :) And OHMADEARS~ I'm glad this turned out better.
I just hope the POVs are right - I researched the differences and well. I still don't know if it's right. /WHAT IS FAIL FUTURE ENGLISH TEACHER. *bricked*
Ah, omg! That was something from my high school teacher and I'm not sure where to quote it. But what I gave you were my observations based on those differences. I don't think I have the authority to say that these are right, but if I dig up my notes (and if you want), maybe I can share them to you?
I FEEL SO SHAMELESS NOW BECAUSE I'M NOT EVEN TAKING ANY WRITING CLASSES! SORRY MIA! If my suggestions were wrong, feel free to disregard them.
And it was my pleasure! I really really enjoyed your story (lolol I think I sound like a broken record now).
You are my intellectual mother thus your comment means a lot. INTELLECTUAL WHAT. *shot*
Seriously. though~ Thank you! And a congratulations to you too! ;)
Yes. I believe they call the format circular. LOL. I forgot. But I found it cute so~ //bricked.
writing 30 means the end of the text in Journ. It's either the "#" or a "30." This is the reason why when a journalist dies. They say.. "And ****** writes 30." something like that. LOL. IDK why. I just felt like using it. Maarte forever
Oh my gosh~~~ I sooooo love the ending! My hairs of my arms stood! LOLL Okay. Was my translation of pagtaas ng balahibo even correct? Whatevs. But really! This is just wonderful! The theme was there and the way it was smoothly delivered was just...just...EPIC <3 <3 <3
Please do continue to write more! I wish I saw this earlier~ You made my day :) Thank you!
Sorry for the sudden comparison but since you dealt with the French Revolutionary Wars, I just thought of that fandom. :))
Such a nice piece. The flow was steady yet not dragging and the slight romance embedded within the story was subtle yet sound. Even though the focus of the story was most likely drama--correct me if I'm wrong--the intensity of the love between them was very apparent.
=)) Keri on~ We are all free to do what we want. It's a democratic country. sabi nila. But not really in the whole sense. //shot.
And I love the French revolution. Okay. I don't know. The Reign of Terror and Marie Antoinette stories are my cup of tea. *shotsoundswrong.butyeah*
About the romance. Well yeah, I like romance subtle in my fics. LOL. //stilldoesn'tlikecornehstuffthatmuch. I actually had a hard time putting that Thanks, love. quote. Cause it was too direct. But I figured it was in-character. *shot*
I'm so glad you liked it~ And yeah. Drama. The fact that well, he had to help find peace instead of his own selfish wants to be with her and all that.
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But I actually like this better. It's clearer, and I could follow the story more. I'm not sure what the others would think, though!
Weeks pass, and he’d decide- he was in love with a ghost, actually, a lost soul - a French noble stuck in her hideout in America, still running away from the chaos of the French Revolution.
Still my favorite part!
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I tried to address all the judges' comments. :) And OHMADEARS~ I'm glad this turned out better.
I just hope the POVs are right - I researched the differences and well. I still don't know if it's right. /WHAT IS FAIL FUTURE ENGLISH TEACHER. *bricked*
Indeed~
Thanks for all your help *hugs*
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I FEEL SO SHAMELESS NOW BECAUSE I'M NOT EVEN TAKING ANY WRITING CLASSES! SORRY MIA! If my suggestions were wrong, feel free to disregard them.
And it was my pleasure! I really really enjoyed your story (lolol I think I sound like a broken record now).
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Seriously. though~ Thank you! And a congratulations to you too! ;)
Yes. I believe they call the format circular. LOL. I forgot. But I found it cute so~ //bricked.
writing 30 means the end of the text in Journ. It's either the "#" or a "30." This is the reason why when a journalist dies. They say.. "And ****** writes 30." something like that. LOL. IDK why. I just felt like using it. Maarte forever
Thank you for your time! *hugs*
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Please do continue to write more! I wish I saw this earlier~ You made my day :) Thank you!
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Oh mu gosh. What is typo? /bricked
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I don't know either if that's the right trans. maybe... you got the shivers? *shot*
OH. And yes. I made sure the ending is... *grins*//bazooka'ed
Anyway~ Thank you so much! *hugs*
Your comment made my day~. ;;)
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Sorry for the sudden comparison but since you dealt with the French Revolutionary Wars, I just thought of that fandom. :))
Such a nice piece. The flow was steady yet not dragging and the slight romance embedded within the story was subtle yet sound. Even though the focus of the story was most likely drama--correct me if I'm wrong--the intensity of the love between them was very apparent.
So lovely. This is really, really good. :>
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And I love the French revolution. Okay. I don't know. The Reign of Terror and Marie Antoinette stories are my cup of tea. *shotsoundswrong.butyeah*
About the romance. Well yeah, I like romance subtle in my fics. LOL. //stilldoesn'tlikecornehstuffthatmuch. I actually had a hard time putting that Thanks, love. quote. Cause it was too direct. But I figured it was in-character. *shot*
I'm so glad you liked it~ And yeah. Drama. The fact that well, he had to help find peace instead of his own selfish wants to be with her and all that.
Thank you for your time! ;;)
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