The Next Great Adventure

[lepidoctor]

Title: The Next Great Adventure

Comments

[sunlit_music]

Beautiful and wise. I can imagine this happening, after Deathly Hallows. Thank you for writing this. It was so touching, and bittersweet. These were my favourite parts:

"I could not have brought myself to love anyone else in the same way as I had loved you."

This fits with canon, and how I imagined Dumbledore.

"Tom Riddle has never known love. He cannot. You, on the other hand, have. It is your ability to love that separates you from him, that has saved you from his fate, for you have shown true remorse, or you would not be sitting here with me. Murder rends the soul apart, as I'm sure you know, and the only thing that can mend its devastating effects is remorse. And you are here now, whole, and intact, and beautiful."

I love how you compared and contrasted Gellert Grindlewald and Tom Riddle. It sharply illustrates what they're made of.

[lepidoctor]

I can't tell you how much your comment is making me smile. I decided to check this before going to bed. I didn't expect comments so soon!

[sunlit_music]

You're more than welcome! :)

[kingdra]

:D :D :D This will forever be my headcanon! ♥

[lepidoctor]

I did try and make it as realistic as possible :) I'm glad to hear you have taken it into your heart.

[celestineangel]

::flails around incoherently because this is so beautiful::

[lepidoctor]

Thank you so much! I'm astounded to think my little fic causes flailing!

[pathology_doc]

Nicely done.

Possibly, just possibly, you clung a little too much to paralleling Gellert's experience with Harry's. In parts I think it made the fic read awkwardly. But in the end you pulled it off well.

The late Sara Douglass put the following words in the mouth of one of her characters: "Never underestimate love, and the choices it drives us to." I think she could easily have been talking about your interpretation of Gellert - and probably Albus too.

[lepidoctor]

I wasn't sure how similar all the Limbo experiences were, so I really had to wing it. If you could pick out which bits were odd and maybe say why they were, I'd be really grateful! I just wrote this on the spur of the moment late at night and posted it right away, and didn't get it beta read (probably should have, but it's just a crazy one off anyway).

That is a brilliant quote, too. And it really does explain the actions of a lot of people, including Gellert and Albus.

[pathology_doc]

It's difficult to put a finger on it exactly - just a vague undefined feeling. I must admit, it diminishes on a second reading and I'm close to withdrawing that criticism.

I'm not sure pointing it out would help you. I suspect my impression would vary according to the reader - your other reviewers seem not to have perceived a problem at all, and they could well be right! - and if there is anything wrong, there's a case to be made that it does not need fixing.

[lepidoctor]

Oh, well, thanks for the feedback though! I have been reading it through from time to time and changing a bit here and there.

[hobbit_kate]

This is very beautiful. I like the element of forgiveness.

[lepidoctor]

Thank you :)