First things first (since you told me I had to learn from that fic): if the writer is 12 yrs old, I guess my first try at slash could have been similar. /grins/ Btw, where do you FIND stuff like that? It's not even SPN? Or is the time of the month SO hard on you?
I will stretch the fuck up of the Wincest verse into two parts, just because I love to torture the bros and the readers. :)
Without John, the whole verse would have never worked. If something CAN make the guys turn against each other, is smthg that must make Dean choose between Dad and Sam or ... when Sam takes the matters in his hands, so to say.
I had to rewatch Shadow before I finished writing this one, for the *authentic* feeling of Dean being all emo and still believing in the illusion he can keep John AND Sam around him at one time.
And omg the last scene was kinda hot in a bottom-ish!Dean kind of way Heh. Girl, I know what you need. And we know, that Dean only bottoms for those, he trusts. /grins/ Except when he's drunki, he'd not be able to keep it up, so he'd
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Yeah. This is what fanfic is all about. Competent writing, easily recognisable characters throughout, angst, rage, and wonderful sex. I cannot stress this last bit enough. So much fanfic goes into such minute detail about body parts during sex scenes that the characters become generic. You can replace them with anyone who has a dick. Not this. This is clearly Sam and Dean fucking. Call me crass but that's my main focus.
Don't get me wrong; the sex would not have been as hot to read about if the angst and the rage and the father issues had not been so well described beforehand. I especially admired the way you had Dean will himself in spite of his helpless anger to be more cheery and wink at Sam. This also marks a transition in the story. It makes it possible for them (and the reader) to get into the mood for sex. Just to be really technical, this turning point is almost exactly *halfway* through the chapter (yes, I did a word count, because I am that much of a geek) - are you just instinctively this good at organising your material
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Awhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. /glowers happily/ You REALLY counted the words to find where's the middle of the fic??????????????????????????? Ehh. I must have been instinctively good this time. And the transition point was necessary - how would they jump to sex from Dean feeling guitly and angry? He is not a character who'd go for "kiss and make up sex". Not with Sam, not in this verse.
So much fanfic goes into such minute detail about body parts during sex scenes that the characters become generic. Oh yeah, I am SO there with you. Soem stories I've read were SO good, till I lost interest in a too long, too detailed sex scene that ruined the smooth flow of the narration.
That's what must have been keeping me from NOT writing a D/S sex scene from A to Z. And I must be still...a bit uncomfortable with the fact they're related.
THANK YOU very muchfor your fb. I don't get many, but this makes the efforts worthwhile.
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I will stretch the fuck up of the Wincest verse into two parts, just because I love to torture the bros and the readers. :)
Without John, the whole verse would have never worked. If something CAN make the guys turn against each other, is smthg that must make Dean choose between Dad and Sam or ... when Sam takes the matters in his hands, so to say.
I had to rewatch Shadow before I finished writing this one, for the *authentic* feeling of Dean being all emo and still believing in the illusion he can keep John AND Sam around him at one time.
And omg the last scene was kinda hot in a bottom-ish!Dean kind of way Heh. Girl, I know what you need. And we know, that Dean only bottoms for those, he trusts. /grins/ Except when he's drunki, he'd not be able to keep it up, so he'd ( ... )
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I'll look forward to the rest!
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Don't get me wrong; the sex would not have been as hot to read about if the angst and the rage and the father issues had not been so well described beforehand. I especially admired the way you had Dean will himself in spite of his helpless anger to be more cheery and wink at Sam. This also marks a transition in the story. It makes it possible for them (and the reader) to get into the mood for sex. Just to be really technical, this turning point is almost exactly *halfway* through the chapter (yes, I did a word count, because I am that much of a geek) - are you just instinctively this good at organising your material ( ... )
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So much fanfic goes into such minute detail about body parts during sex scenes that the characters become generic. Oh yeah, I am SO there with you. Soem stories I've read were SO good, till I lost interest in a too long, too detailed sex scene that ruined the smooth flow of the narration.
That's what must have been keeping me from NOT writing a D/S sex scene from A to Z. And I must be still...a bit uncomfortable with the fact they're related.
THANK YOU very muchfor your fb. I don't get many, but this makes the efforts worthwhile.
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I see you start quoting yoru fav parts. :) Good. Seriously, my op is the shorter, the better. The harder to write, too.
Thank you. Hope you won't be disappointed by what follows.
BUT! Before that, I'll post another D/K fic.
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