Fic: Drunken Kiss

[grl_in_red]

Title: Drunken Kiss
Author: grl_in_red
Rating: PG-13 (language, drunkenness)
Summary: The title says it all.
A/N: This is not what I wanted, but I'm posting it anyway because dashall made me. *blames* :D I'm going to try to write this again, in a different form, later. GAH. WHY IS WRITING SO DIFFICULT.

Comments

[dashall]

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW YOU MADE ME AWWWWWWWWWWW LOUDLY IN THE LIBRARY AND I SWEAR IT GOT QUIETER FOR A SECOND.

:[ :[ :[ this was sad. I am sad.

Hmhmhm. I liked Paul's reaction and John's reaction to Paul's reaction... but I think the apostrophes in the dialogue were a bit unnecessary. That's definitely personal preference, so you can ignore me. It just inhibited me from getting really into the dialogue, because I had to stop and think about how drunk!JohnandPaul would talk. Besides that, you did a verrrry good job at describing Paul's hint of desire but overall disapproval and John's stupid approach to trying to get Paul. :]

[grl_in_red]

Awwws gooood. I'm glad the reaction was mostly good. :D But yeah, I'm still totally redoing this.

With the apostrophes... I couldn't leave them off and have them speaking all drunkenly. But I was really unsure about even making them speaking "drunkenly". But then if I didn't it would have sounded completely wrong, like they were all coherent and precise and that's ridiculous. So yeah... In my redo, I'm prob not even going to have them talking much, if at all. So, that problem solved. :D

[dashall]

Oh okay! I see. Do whatever you like, I'm just a measly little reviewer, that's all. And a friend, but yeah. You're the writer, it's your call. Do what feels natural. :]

[grl_in_red]

Oh yeah, you're my friend too! Hey I'm sorry I didn't text you back tonight, I was watching something on quantum mechanics. :D But anyway, you're probably asleep now, so I hope you have a good night's sleep and I'll talk to you tomorrow. <3

[jpgr1963]

LOVED IT! Love drunken kisses and slobbering, angry Paul and John groping for a bit of Paul love. LOVED IT! And delighted to see you writing again. *huge smile*

JP

[grl_in_red]

Haha THANK YOU, love! I'm so glad you liked it. This actually was my attempt to get myself writing again. xD Things have just been so crazy, and I don't know, I haven't felt very inspired. I should post some old stuff though. Just so I don't feel totally cut off, haha.