Comments | groove2life: IT'S A DAY!

groove2life

IT'S A DAY!

Jul 06, 2004 16:06

Ok...sorry for my blatent lack of happiness in that last entry but I was trying to be honest with my feelings and when it comes to negative emotions..I just don't deal well with them! Anyways...I have been in a poetry writing mood (wrote this this morning)and so...I ask your critique and hopefully love ( Read more... )

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brye July 6 2004, 20:20:37 UTC

why be sorry? heck.. this is your journal... nice poem... btw... you need to teach me some meditation.. i am so high strung at times... have a great night! I am pretty low key I think tonight.,

sndchasr July 6 2004, 20:56:32 UTC

don't be sorry! write how you feel..it helps to get it out and we will still be here happy or sad!...I sound like a song dont I

groove2life July 6 2004, 23:51:01 UTC

I think we could get someone to sing it! How about Prince or uhhh Vanilla Ice?! haha

Thanks amigo you always rock!

sndchasr July 7 2004, 03:33:00 UTC

Vanilla Ice has more free time and I hear he works cheap lol

groove2life July 7 2004, 15:23:24 UTC

He was just in concert here on the 2nd..amazing how they still somehow keep their careers going. It's equally amazing that even in Columbus there was a venue that would have him!

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ripper82 July 7 2004, 03:51:25 UTC

Now that we've chatted for 5 minutes I'm not so embarassed to ask... Will you explain this to me? lol... I just be terminally confused.

*hug*

groove2life July 7 2004, 15:22:13 UTC

I would if I could but it's poetry. Like a painting, it is more on how the reader perceives it to be. What is your perception? :-p

ripper82 July 7 2004, 20:50:15 UTC

Well you said "I ask your critique and hopefully love.... :-)"

You can absolutely have my love if you want it, just let me know ;) lol

And as for what it means... And I hate putting words in your mouth... (hmm, no naughty thoughts, no naughty thoughts...) But the first stanza seems to be saying you feel stuck between an undesirable past and future, and possibly that you're carefully trying to figure out how to get out of that place. The second stanza is even more obscure, but sounds like you're saying there's something outside of your past and future, possibly someone else's past and future, that interact with your own to create "tides" of life and love between the two of you.

Ugh, was that anything like you intended? lol

Just give me a kiss and I'll die happy! :)

groove2life July 9 2004, 17:38:01 UTC

Whoa! You're good...you're really good! INcredible translation that is very very close and almost exactly what I was feeling. Are you sure you're not in my head? Are you just a fignment and I'm going crazy? :-)

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