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[gundamboy]

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It was around two in the afternoon now. Eddie could tell by the way the sun was beating down on his already dry, worn skin. Looking around he could see the clouds, some shaped like cotton candy. It had been a long time since Eddie had tasted anything sweet; anything at all really. Down on the ground he could see the luscious

Comments

[amandapea]

I don't know what your getting at but it's very well written. You're going to do fine in school.

[kyuhbite]

Wow. You can write boyo.