chapter one of sparrow, edmund, and alister's backstory

[h_u_s_h_e_d]

casey wanted to start working on this as an actual story, and we ended up working on it together. i thought i'd post the first bit of it. i posted a little on flickr, but if you read it there, there's more now (and what i had posted has been edited a little). this is a mixture of both me and casey writing, but mostly it's me cuz i've had more time

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[jessplayn]

Oh! That's the end? I would totally love to read more...

[h_u_s_h_e_d]

for now! that's all we've gotten done so far hehehehe

[thakyuki]

I want more! I couldn't stop reading till it reached the end.

[h_u_s_h_e_d]

hehehehe :D

[h_u_s_h_e_d]

ok, thanks for the tip!! i'm so bad with descriptions, i have to remind myself all the time and it feels so forced as a result :( i'll drop the cheesy mirror bit! i was afraid of waiting too long to describe him hehehe

[h_u_s_h_e_d]

that's true... i've always hated when there's suddenly some description way far into the book and you're thrown for a loop trying to picture the character differently for the rest of the book. like "aw crap i was picturing them with short brown hair, now it's supposed to be long and black??" maybe it's just me being a putz lol but second chapter is not too far in at all, so i'll definitely have alister describe him!

i dunno why, but i have SUCH a hard time describing pretty much anything :/ i'm good at putting words into pictures, but not at putting pictures into words. i used to be better at it. maybe i should try to find some describing exercises or something lol

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[corerue]

Can't wait to see more!

Re: WRITE A BOOK WOMAN!

[h_u_s_h_e_d]

:B

[eilonwyg]

Coming along really great! Took me a bit to figure out whether this was BTMS or Bandit's Landing, especially with them talking about Morrow (a detail I actually kind of liked). I like how you kept the characters moving as they contemplated - Edmund spooning out chicken, Alister chewing on his bagel. Makes it feel more alive and dynamic.

[h_u_s_h_e_d]

yeah i should've specified... i mentioned it on flickr but didn't think to mention it here for some reason lol but yeah, btms.

thanks! :D