The Sun Behind Your Eyes

[hablarloco]

The Sun Behind Your Eyes
Pairing: Taeyeon/Tiffany
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~4600
A/N: Not real. AU. First fic, be gentle (>u < ") Supposed to be a Valentine's Day present but it's late.

Comments

[razor_funkydude]

very nicely written... ^_^ you should write more!!! :)

[hablarloco]

Thank you thank you! I'll write more when I get new ideas!

[chikaon08]

This, THIS is your first fic? Well sorry to say it's not good...it's fricken AMAZING. Are you serious that this is your first fic?

God I don't even know where to begin. I loved the contrast between Tiffany and Taeyeon. I can really see Tiffany as that eccentric art student haha.

I liked the issues you brought up. Dealing with sexuality and all. It's never an old topic to read about, especially when it's something I go through myself.

I had a feeling it was Jessica at first, but then you mentioned her with brown hair so it threw me off haha.

Gosh I really feel like I should say more, but I'm at a loss for words. I got those tingles in multiple scenes, you know those tingles you get that run down to your toes when you've read something incredible. And who cares if this was a late Vday present. The quality more than made up for it.

Amazing job and I really look forward to more works from you! Your writing style is just my taste. :)

[hablarloco]

It's not the first fic I started but it's definitely the first fic that I actually completed (>x < )

I wrote this fic mainly from Taeyeon's point of view, so maybe that's why Tiffany's weirdness stood out. Jessica's hair was just a convenient prop to add some mystery into the story. She had cut her hair and dyed it brown after dumping Tiffany.

And bb chin up! Sexuality issues inspired me to write and I'm glad I wrote something you could connect with.

I really appreciate your comment and I hope you'll like what I write in the future. (^u^)

[regreted]

um. this was impressive. i'd like to second every thing chikaon08 wrote.

but, i think that the ending was a tad on the weak side, you really clamped down one dissecting taeyeon, but in the end, she just accepted tiffany, it felt kind of hollow because there wasnt as much going in inside her head, as outside.

eh, but even with that said, it was pretty amazing.

[hablarloco]

I agree with the weak ending. It's actually the part I spent the most time rewriting than the others.

I kinda meant for Taeyeon to be a pushover when it comes to Tiffany in this story. So when Tiffany tells her she loves her, Taeyeon's just like, "screw everything, I don't care, I love you back." So that may be what made her character hollow.

Thank you for reading and for your comment (^^)

Re: Uh... Really long comment

[hablarloco]

Your comment means a lot to me because your one of the SNSD fic writers out there that I enjoy reading regularly <3.

No, I don't mind long comments at all, I really appreciate it.

Thank you for reading even when you're tired and for taking the time to comment! It motivates me to write moarrrrrrrr!\(^o ^ /)

[kwon_seobang]

wow i really enjoyed reading this. definitely going in one of my fav one shots collection.
i hope you write more and soon! i can't believe this is your first fic, it's simply amazing! :)

[hablarloco]

Thank you for reading! Glad you enjoyed it. And yeah, I'll write more soon!!:D