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[ponskum]

original mind
rings like monastery bell
cold, just before dawn

Comments

[chatalaine]

I like that. I...almost know what it means. And that's a good thing in a haiku, imop.

[ponskum]

you are absolutely right. it is very important that the reader identify with the image that's being presented! in this case i am taking some risk in presenting a topic that i am very familiar with as a practicing zen buddhist, but which may not be as familiar to an outside audience. i was hoping the Form presented in this haiku would at least fill in enough of the reference to give the outside audience something to grab on to. thank you very much for the comment.

=)