I miss you, Tim Drake

[halcyon_moon]

Title: I miss you, Tim Drake
Characters: Tim Drake, Kon-El
Word Count: 182
Author: halcyon_moon
Rating: PG
Summary: Kon is having a somewhat emotional "yearning" for Tim. He misses him so much during the week and may have fallen in love. Done for my Tim/Kon Slash Fic Challenge.
Disclaimer: DC Owns the characters; I'm just having fun.
Prompt: Secrets

Comments

[dylogger]

I really enjoyed this piece and the succinct yet elaborate descriptions of how Kon loves Tim. However, I think that you should seperate that whole block into smaller paragraphs, as that will give more emphasis and have more impact.

Nice job on this.

[halcyon_moon]

Thank you!

It's funny because I'm doing the 750 Words project and this was just a part of what I wrote today and I said to myself "hey this actually could work as a little ficlet." so I posted it.

But yes, I agree. I might edit it and elaborate on his feelings later.

[dylogger]

Hey, I love the 750 words! I'm doing it right now too, but I changed it to whatever I feel like at the moment because I use it as a brain-starter for NaNo.

Heh. I wasn't saying to make it longer, I was saying to seperate it into different paragraphs so it would be easier to read and more impactful on the reader.

You're welcome, though!

[halcyon_moon]

I broke it up. And thanks, I agree that it makes it easier to read. Thanks.

[halcyon_moon]

Now that you mention it, I might actually continue this series "feelings of kon" haha. :)

Glad you liked it!

[halcyon_moon]

I think he might feel the same. hehe.

[kirax2]

Oh, Kon. Mail it, honey. He loves you, too!

[halcyon_moon]

He wants to mail it!

[eternal_moonie]

AWESOME Letter to Tim Drake! Now he has to visit Kon!