Comments | haqin: HxM Oneshot: Talk to me

haqin

HxM Oneshot: Talk to me

Dec 04, 2011 14:25

Title: Talk to me

Series: Eyeshield 21

Pairing: HirumaXMamori

Rating: T (for minor coarse language)

Summary: Now that they are no longer working together as quarterback and team manager, the ex-QB shows no interest to talk to the ex-manager. Take place during their final year in Deimon (and they haven't had any relationship yet).

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hirumaxmamori, hiruma, mamori, eyeshield 21, fanfic

Comments 3

cherry_tiger December 6 2011, 16:00:33 UTC

Your English could use more help, maybe next time get a beta? But I love the idea for this... Hiruma preferring to be more quiet towards Mamori, hoping he'd at least understand him even without words. It's cute! Thanks for sharing!

haqin December 9 2011, 02:20:57 UTC

Thank you for your advice! I think I've heard about beta reader before. Maybe I'll try to ask for help from them next time (but will i write anymore? -_-')
Yeah, I love their mutual understanding! n_n

Fun read! lescribble May 4 2012, 07:52:58 UTC

This is cute, from the random confession down to the bickering. :)

It's probably just me, but the story would have been just as fun if it ended with the line “Yeah, why would I pretend to want to drink coffee!?” I could just imagine Mamori's angry face popping in at that moment.

Now I have started to wonder, what would Hiruma called Mamori on their 3rd year high-school? << That's an interesting thought, care to write that out?