Brigit's Flame, September Week 2, Gear

[hardassonance]

I had one rule when I joined this community. No excessive serial stories crossing over different weeks. I am breaking that in my first contest right now, but this stands alone. I was going to include references to last week but I didn't want to confuse people who didn't read it. Consider this another story in the same world as last week. I don't

Comments

[mister_troper]

That was impressively creepy. The whole camera idea was especially well executed, and very satisfying on a lot of levels.

[toxic_apiaceae]

Whoa.

As soon as he plunged the knife in, I figured that was coming. But it STILL didn't prevent me from practically jumping out of my seat. Awesome job!

[jlly_coppercorn]

Robots: Like people, only better.
Can he heal?

I'm glad you continued the story line from last week. This stands well on its own for anyone who didn't get to read the week one entry. Keep it up and you just might have a novel after all.

Good story, good luck this week.

[katden]

So... what's wrong with excessive serials crossing over different weeks, eh?
::and then she grins::
I like your storyline. Very thorough, very creepy.
I'm glad you joined the FLAME!

[aquarius_galuxy]

I KNEW he was a robot!!!! =P "gently pushed upwards by the muscles in his cheeks contracting, pulling his lips into a smile and revealing perfectly white teeth." was the first sign I took as him being a little less than human! =p

The part about the swirling cameras was really interesting - who knows how those can be exploited! =P

But what was creepiest was when the presenter said that "there are more like me in the audience". Makes me think of what could happen when something goes awry with the robots! =P