For Justine's Benefit. I need help! thank you! Love you darling

[harleysparrow]

silhouetted in Silent september

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[harleysparrow]

I tried so hard with the capital letters. fuck YOU CAPITAL LETTERS

[harleysparrow]

ha ha I didn't even do that on purpose with the incredible capitalization of all the letters at the end. ExCeLlEnT. (That was on purpose.)

[ms_gamgee_89]

I like what you've done with it! If I had to pick a favorite part, it'd be:
So too will my coltish feet follow
as the fearless day kneels to velvet night

or:
The Night Breaks.
sleet pelts arms
clings to curves and
sweltering napes
breath Caught in a throat raw with
reality and waking

Do you have any ideas for the missing line?

And yeah, I prefer "sorrow" to "sadness" there, it flows better.

[harleysparrow]

I feel you I feel you, I have a little bit of an idea.. it's like breaking from the starting line, that moment where your heart stops after you hit the ball and have to run, or when the gun fires and you have to dive into the pool. that kind of feeling.

[harleysparrow]

*blush* I didn't see the first part where you complimented it... thank you. That's high praise.