I owe you so much for editing all this for me -- something like 20,000 words in the last two weeks! You do such a wonderful, thorough job, and the story has gained so much from your input. Thank you, again, from the bottom of my heart.
I've thoroughly enjoyed these last few chapters - is that it, or is there more? Please let there be more!
How old is Suzanna, anyway? I think you must have said but I've forgotten.
Anyway, as ever; great dialogue and description and plot, and such lively characters. I see another wedding in the future - Tom Sparrow and Anne Norrington!
There's one more chapter, which I will put up soon (tonight or tomorrow) -- it just came back from hereswith and tessabeth and I need to do some final tweaking, and then post it.
Suzanna was 9 in Norrington's Choice, and this is 7 years later, so 16.
I'm so happy you enjoyed these chapters! Thanks so much for all your encouraging comments.
The Black Pearl's entry to the harbor, with everyone crowded 'round the docks is so grand, and has just the right feel of impatience from the watchers. With our expectations of instant communication, it's good to be reminded that Elizabeth and Maggie and Suzanna (and everyone else!) would be wondering why they were back sooner than expected and just why Owens isn't visible, and... and...
Oh! Adore Weatherby's use of "miscreant"!
A chest wound. It was deep, and at first we thought... but he is better! Against all our fears. Yaaayy!! *settles back from edge of chair, quite relieved* *reads more ... grins* Oh! A bona fide miracle (wait, two!) for Gibbs to add to his tales!
Norrington returned and was put in possession of the facts Wonderful phrase!
Owens was definitely an object of sympathetic interest for everyone in this. How could Suzanna resist? And a double wedding seemed appropriately excessive for this crazy sort of adventure/romance. Such fun! Glad you approved. :)
Ah, finally, an explanation for why there are no children for Will and Elizabeth! And now, hope springs anew. :-)
I think that, while it's hardly been a focus, you've dealt well with the religious aspect of this story. So often authors use it as an opportunity to criticize the establishment (often justly), but you've achieved a nice balance between the good and ill, and left room for faith, besides.
Religion was an important part of most people's lives in that time, and one rarely sees it mentioned in PotC stories in spite of their period setting. I know: Disney. But when you take that a step farther and start writing fanfiction, particularly longer stories, there is more room for historical detail and context. Authors that do write of religion tend to lean strongly one way or another. But religious people are just that: people. With all their propensities toward good or evil. Painting them all with a single brush doesn't make sense, unless your sole object in writing is to prove a point.
But religious people are just that: people. With all their propensities toward good or evil. Painting them all with a single brush doesn't make sense, unless your sole object in writing is to prove a point.
I agree completely, and it's unfortunate that it's hard to find authors who are willing to write that way. I also enjoyed that you gave the padre a bit of a past, he wasn't always the picture of piousness and didn't pretend to be, but was just a struggling human like the rest of us. I think he nailed it when he said that all he could do was try and rely on God's grace for the rest. :-)
I think people almost have to face their bad selves before they can understand the value of being good. Saints aren't born that way, in most cases. And I adore the Franciscan philosophy. Whenever I hear a Franciscan priest speak, they seem so compassionate, and have such a great sense of humor.
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Working on the last one now!
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Good luck with the writing!
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How old is Suzanna, anyway? I think you must have said but I've forgotten.
Anyway, as ever; great dialogue and description and plot, and such lively characters. I see another wedding in the future - Tom Sparrow and Anne Norrington!
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Suzanna was 9 in Norrington's Choice, and this is 7 years later, so 16.
I'm so happy you enjoyed these chapters! Thanks so much for all your encouraging comments.
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Could be...! Stranger things have happened (undead skeletal pirates, to name but one).
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Oh! Adore Weatherby's use of "miscreant"!
A chest wound. It was deep, and at first we thought... but he is better! Against all our fears.
Yaaayy!! *settles back from edge of chair, quite relieved*
*reads more ... grins* Oh! A bona fide miracle (wait, two!) for Gibbs to add to his tales!
Norrington returned and was put in possession of the facts
Wonderful phrase!
Wheee - a double wedding!
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I think that, while it's hardly been a focus, you've dealt well with the religious aspect of this story. So often authors use it as an opportunity to criticize the establishment (often justly), but you've achieved a nice balance between the good and ill, and left room for faith, besides.
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I agree completely, and it's unfortunate that it's hard to find authors who are willing to write that way. I also enjoyed that you gave the padre a bit of a past, he wasn't always the picture of piousness and didn't pretend to be, but was just a struggling human like the rest of us. I think he nailed it when he said that all he could do was try and rely on God's grace for the rest. :-)
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