I really enjoyed this. The feelings, the movement, the action. But, I think most of all the sheer emotions from the Husband, and even his friends when they told him.
Thanks lady. I'm not exactly sure how to continue/finish it; I originally thought of adapting a scene from a play for the ending: the husband would get his friend to kill his wife, and the ending line is "Make it look like rape." But I'm not sure if I can even fit the amount of mental turmoil needed to lead up to that part in only 5 or 6 more pages (max). Then I thought that the owner of the porn shop could be characterized a lot more, which would take up more space. What do you think?
This is really something. I would enjoy reading a novel exactly like this. I continued reading, expecting there to be more. I would buy a book of yours on this story.
Thank you :) I would love to write something lengthy about this; I have already finished more of the story, and I will post that revision soon. If there are any specific parts you love (and possibly why), or other advice, input, or ideas you have, I would appreciate them.
So how did you come across my journal? Are you also a writer? I am always looking for some serious writers to share critiques- poetry, plays, fiction, anything.
Lol, well to tell you the truth, and strangely enough, I came across your journal by accident. I was searching for the band "Hawthorne Heights" and your journal popped up. I happened to get interested in this one specific story though. Im sorry, Im not a writer and I really am not that good at giving advice on it. But I am a big fan of reading. I would love to read the rest of what you have on this story.
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So how did you come across my journal? Are you also a writer? I am always looking for some serious writers to share critiques- poetry, plays, fiction, anything.
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