Edited for FUN!

[hazathin]

Today the sky danced bright colors. Yesterday a pale blue painted the heavens. Tomorrow there shall be the forbidding smell of rain to come. I share this information with you, because I see in your eyes that I can trust you. Furthermore, I see your heart and know what type of person you are. I do not pretend to be the almighty god, for that

Comments

[wamblingwalaby]

I like the rephrasing of the paragraph much better- the scentences have more variety which is very interesting read.

As to the two before paragraphs, I feel like it is a lot of fluff, that is light and somewhat engaging to read, but I'm not sure where it is going.
That's all I will say about it for now.