Ghostrio
With the additions from the next morning:
a wraith a shade and memory meet
and each looks down at others feet
and with surprise see only air
suspecting flesh and blood be there
and comprehension draws each face
as all absorb the hollowed place
and none are scared of the others met
for death has erased all regret
...
a wraith a shade and memory meet
and each looks down at others feet
and with surprise see only air
suspecting flesh and blood be there
and comprehension draws each face
as all absorb the hollowed place
and none are scared of the others met
for death has erased all regret
...
Comments 1
"and each looks down at others feet
and with surprise see only air"
The syllables in each line are perfect, or the rhythm is lovely.
Did you mean “expecting” instead of suspecting?
What others are you speaking of? I found that vague too, I think you could hint at it more.
But I love the way the poem walks through the form and existence of the ghost. It gives the poem a slight haunting quality (besides from its already haunting subject).
I like this poem a lot, and the length seems perfect for a brief, slight description.
This has a light humorous feel, without feeling like a “joke” or nonserious. I like.
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