two scenes from a WIP

[hazelayes]

Act 1 Scene 2. (Excerpt from "Undercurrent" a WIP by Hazelayes

Comments

[vysila]

Sorry it took me a while to get back with comments. I hope you weren’t wondering what was wrong with the scenes - or you

two scenes

[hazelayes]

Thank you so much for getting back - yes, I WAS worried, a bit... but mostly that I'd put it where no-one would find it. I have little idea what I'm doing with this LJ business, seriously.

Your comments are most welcome, all of them. It is still rough, you are right, and there's much that is unfinalised on the main story (which is 4 acts long with 3 or four scenes in each). The reason for posting this bit is, as I said, I may not use it in the end and I didn't want to bin it without it having a little outing at least (grin), but as it's my first ever try at writing MFU I also wanted more than one opinion as to whether I'd got the voices etc. before I really go to town on the rest of the story. Linda Cornett has held my hand through the birth and so is not, as she put it, tabula rasa on it any more.

I really, really appreciate the time and effort you spent giving it a crit, it was so useful and your encouraging praise was such a relief!
"I may hope then ?" As they used to write in them days.

Thanks again,

Sue

[vysila]

Have you considered posting this to

[strainconductor]

ooo. Interesting! I love the characterization, it was so fun to read. I look forward to more!

ps, May I friend you?

Friending

[hazelayes]

Yes, of course! Friend away. I'd like that. Do i have to do anything to friend you back or is it each way in one operation? As I wrote elsewhere, I am a technoprat!

Re: Friending

[strainconductor]

Ah, yes yous friend someone by going to their user info page, and click "Friend" and vo-ila

Friended =D

Thanks very much!