Team Epilogue: 15. He who can, does. He who can't, teaches the Dark Arts.

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Title: We Flood Empty Lakes
Team: Epilogue
Author: turningleft
Prompt: 15. He who can, does. He who can't, teaches the Dark Arts.
Wordcount: ~4700
Rating: R
Warnings: Angst, darkfic, dystopia, Epilogue-compliant, mindfuck, non-linear narrative, highly non-traditional/experimental structure, pretentious prose, postwar, profanity, references to canon

Comments

[curia_regis]

I've already told you how much I love this on the team comm, but I thought I'd say it again. It's brilliant. The structure. Your use of second person! I ♥ second person when it's done well and you have the tone of each section down perfectly. The writing is so gorgeous, and lyrical.

♥

[smirking_muse]

Wow, this story is almost done like artwork with the different words and styling. From a purely aesthetic standpoint- very cool. I like how you used the large words so carefully and well- and how obsession kept coming up… so true when it comes to our boys. That was really wonderful. The style you chose was interesting. It catalogues the events from scattered times and allows readers to kind of fill in the blanks with select highlighted words that keep us focused on what's really important about it. It seems to follow some sort of reflection- random, not always organized, but tells a story anyway

[annabeth_gray]

I find myself agreeing with you on several things, but (as I mentioned in my own review) the whole story is very creepy.
At first I didn't realize that it wasn't written in chronological order. Only Draco's death at made that clear to me.
It's rather disjointed and confusing and, I think, pretty much open to interpretation. Regardless, the way it ended made me think Harry might be stuck in his own mind, which creates a loop of specific events that may or may not have happened, because there are things he can't cope with. Possibly I'm so far off the mark that's its not even funny, but it certainly is something to think about.

I'll stop rambling now.

Bye,
Betty

[okydoky]

I absolutely adored this, I love how you formatted this, it looks amazing, and it reads beautifully as well. The second person narrative is done brillaintly, and well, I just loved it. ♥

[lorac64]

Wow! This is a powerful writing style that really conveys the depth of Harry's emotions. I love/hate that we never know if it was a prophetic dream or a cautionary healing dream. The bits of narrative and Harry's inner voice remind me of bubbles that sometimes merge and sometimes pop. I can almost see the image reflected in the shiny, shifting surface...but not quite.

Well done!

[nolagal]

So well done! strange and powerful! Great job!