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Team EWE: 9. Reparo in time saves nine.

Apr 30, 2009 14:31

Title: Waking in the Snake Pit
Team: EWE
Author: pervyunitwins
Prompt: 9. Reparo in time saves nine.
Wordcount: ~18,600
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: A wee bit of angst.
Summary: Harry veers off the expected path.
Author's Note: This is the first time I have ever participated in any sort of fic fest. I was excited to be a part of such a wonderful fest. Thanks to ( Read more... )

nc-17, prompt: 9. reparo in time saves nine, fic, team ewe, round ii

Comments 36

jamie2109 April 30 2009, 13:13:43 UTC

A very interesting story! I found it hard to follow in places as your language, particularly the dialogue was very formal - lacking in contractions and so it came across as stilted. You're very descriptive of everything which gave us a precise, clear picture of exactly what you wanted us to see. I was a bit confused as to why Harry kissed Draco at the start, but I did love the moment when Draco realised he wasn't dreaming, lol.

Well done and a great entry for the team!!!

pervyunitwins May 1 2009, 04:36:27 UTC

My story was so long precisely because of all the details I put in. I saw the scene in my head and I wanted everyone who read my story to see everything too.

The reason that Harry kissed Draco was because he was so surprised to see Draco so vulnerable that before he knew it he had launched himself across the room and was locking lips with his school rival.

Thanks for your comment. I am glad you liked it, over all.

Go Team EWE!

smirking_muse April 30 2009, 13:25:29 UTC

The way this story began was absolutely incredible. It was very attention grabbing and had me completely hooked. I really liked the twist about the dark marks. It just about killed me how they were sleeping and whatnot in the same room without immediately noticing (obviously, I was born without patience)! I was dying for a confrontation- and when it happened, oh, it was perfect! I liked the I-think-I’m-dreaming beginning- and how you showed it from both sides. It was such a monumental moment that I think having both vantage points was crucial and wonderful! It was so perfect and snarky and gave me an enormous grin ( ... )

pervyunitwins May 1 2009, 04:47:27 UTC

Your praise makes me what to send you everything I have ever written. Maybe I will. I knew from the getgo that I wanted the two boys to immediately after the final battle be thrown together. The bit in which Draco thinks he is dreaming was too funny in my head not to write in.

I personally love Luna and she was sorted into Ravenclaw for a reason. Plus she obviously matured an awful lot after being thrown into a dungeon. Also she is sometimes not seen so she is naturally more observant and was able to catch onto how the boys felt for each other.

I really wanted to make their kisses amazing and passionate. And I am glad that I succeeded. I think I was evoking some romance writer, but with my own twist.

Thank you for your comment for for being a great beta! Go Team EWE!

ashe_frost April 30 2009, 14:45:57 UTC

I'm so excited to read this this weekend when I finally get a day off! And maybe secretly hoping it's slow at work and I can sneak and read it on my phone. Heh.

Either way, watch this space for comment. Go team!

sugareey April 30 2009, 20:56:24 UTC

I think most of what I want to say is covered by jamie2109.

BUT.

I really liked how you started this story off, with that very last scene in DH to give the story a context. And Harry sleeping in Draco's room! Totally awesome!

Your descriptions helped to paint a picture in my mind. Really lovely...and very Slytherin of Harry to tease Draco so much! That was kind of awesome.

The curiosity that you brought out from each of them made them just work with each other. Go to each other. I found that very interesting and fun.

Good work!

pervyunitwins May 1 2009, 04:50:28 UTC

I actually reread the whole of the 7th book before I started writing this fic and I really just wanted my story to start right after that last scene. I pointedly ignored rereading the epilogue, once was enough for me, thank you very much.

Now that Harry does not have to fight for everyone, I wanted some of his characteristics that are not played up in the books to come out, like his Slytherin side.

Thank you so much for you comment!

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pervyunitwins May 2 2009, 23:35:32 UTC

I really wanted to stay true to Draco and I thought a Draco in denial is just perfect. I love Luna to pieces and I really wanted to include her in the fic so I thought why not have her be a kind of matchmaker to the oblivious boys.

Thank you so much for commenting! I am glad you loved my story.