Chapter 2

[heartsartre]

Chapter 2: The Beginning

It was fall 1977 when Nastusia was born. The streets were crowded and bustling with a tension that comes from mixed racial communities everywhere. It was by no means hostile, but there extended over the community a sense of watching and of constant acknowledgement. Only Nastusia’s parents were blissfully and momentarily

Comments

I'm excited to read more.

[anonymous]

I like this second chapter. both 1 and 2 open strong, but while 1 sets up a mystery, this opening does a good job of characterizing the mom and dad. I feel like I know the mother better than the father though. Nice strong voice in this chapter. I thought chapter 1 was well written, but it was a very direct retelling of the evil stepsister story, so it lacked a lot of the strength that your voice brings to chapter 2. Maybe this works with the overarching story? I will have to wait and see. Overall I'm very eager to keep reading and see what will happen next. Your beginning is an incredibly strong hook. Keep going!

I too am writing a novel for Nanowrimo, but I don't think it will find it's way onto the internet with any swiftness. I'm writing in my journal on bart and at lunch at work, so I will wait to transfer it into the aether until I want to edit.

let me know if you'd like full blown writing workshop style constructive criticism at some point otherwise I will just sit over here and cheer you on.

-Elizabeth