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moirae in heavenisonfire

❝you've got a lure i can't deny but you had your chance so say goodbye❞

Apr 09, 2010 09:48

rogue will | axis powers hetalia | 1800 words | turkey ; hungary ; austria | pg |
in which austria fights a war to win hungary back from turkey.
Written for tsinelas

( “I’ll admit it, you do better as a free bird than a caged one. But I’d rather have a bird with clipped wings than none at all.” )

✦fanfiction, ❥pairing: turkey/hungary, ✶character: turkey, ✶character: austria, ✖request, ❥pairing: austria/hungary, ✶character: hungary, ✤fandom: hetalia

Comments 17

maikichelorrain April 9 2010, 17:25:12 UTC

O3O
This is wonderful (you fullfil my love for Turkey/Hungary).
I like the parallelism of Elizaveta's interactions with Sadiq and with Roderich. The kiss scenes were my favourite. And... the feelings of both men for Elizaveta - they respect her... perfect.
Thank you!

moirae April 10 2010, 18:46:01 UTC

Ah, thank you! I'm glad you liked it! I really love Turkey and Hungary's history but I can never seem to find enough of it.

I love how strong Hungary manages to be in all of her different roles and with all of the insanely powerful men around her. :)

Thanks again. &hearts

leriacossato April 9 2010, 17:53:16 UTC

I never thought I would get into Turkey/Hungary but...

yeah. XD

You might want to check some of your spelling and grammar though.

moirae April 10 2010, 18:46:48 UTC

Oh, really? I thought I'd double-checked. Mind pointing out where the errors are? :o

leriacossato April 10 2010, 19:12:38 UTC

He straitens up, clearing his throat. “Well…I should be going.”
Straiten should be straighten.

And I'm not sure if this one needs correcting but I did notice that:
for a moment he finally reverted to small child she used to know him as,
There should perhaps be a 'the' between to and small?

...I'm a total grammar nazi sorry OTL

qualapec April 9 2010, 20:55:56 UTC

This was great. Anything with Hungary in fucking ARMOR and busting skulls is win (especially after Austria being all "it's too dangerous"). I know that wasn't the focus...but I loved seeing it nonetheless :D

And I love the way you write Turkey. He really acts like he's the baddest thing around, and that scene where he grabs her is borderline sexy.

I also really loved Hungary's thoughts on how Austria had changed since she last saw him.

Awesome.

moirae April 10 2010, 18:47:31 UTC

I'm glad! I love showing off Hungary's bad ass side!

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it! :D

inquisitorial April 10 2010, 02:14:17 UTC

oh god, Ottoman!Hungary fic. I really loved how the endings of the different scenes matched the beginning of the next scene. It really seems to drive in the end of Ottoman Hungary and the beginning of Austro-Hungary points of history.

moirae April 10 2010, 18:49:49 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked the style of it, I was doing a good bit of experimentation with it so it's nice to know it turned out well.

romanitas April 10 2010, 07:57:55 UTC

sjdhkfjgfdg I loved this ;w;

I really liked the tie-ins/transitions/connections/parallels/wtfever between each section. Nicely done. 8)

Why so badass Hungary )8

♥

moirae April 10 2010, 18:50:49 UTC

yaaaaaay i'm so happy &hearts

because hungary is more manly than austria & turkey. combined.

:D

romanitas April 10 2010, 21:33:43 UTC

:>>> ♥

That is an accurate assessment, yes.

\8D/