❝i'm much too proud; all you do is fill me up with doubt❞

[moirae]

an evolving relationship | pokémon | 1300 words | lance ; clair | pg-13 |
in which two members of one family take different routes and end up in the same place.
set before game canon.

Comments

[lark]

I would have never considered this pairing before this fic, but you make it so hard not to fall in love with it!

“Don’t thank me yet,” she snapped. “I swear, Lance, if you don’t beat the Elite Four after this, I will personally kill you.”

“You could have given me no better motivation.”

This exchange is so smooth. You capture these characters so perfectly in these two short lines. ♥

His Dragonite floated into the water next to Clair’s Dragonair, which stiffened primly and turned away.
This made me laugh. XD
I love how you mention her dragonair in every single scene. It's such a strong symbol for her.

The only thing I would mention is that you use a lot of adverbs. There's nothing wrong with adverbs, of course, but diversification is fun? One teacher once told me "If you find the perfect verb, you will never need to use adverbs again," and that's something I personally strive towards. Just a thought.

Thank you for writing this! ♥

[kaorikuni]

i'm captivated by your portrait of lance. and i like clair and lace's exchange.

i've been looking for fanwork of this ship for a long while, not finding anything until this. you are awesome and thanks for writing this! <3

*KYAH*