Half Blast- Chapter 2

[hectic1]

Disclaimer: Erica Hahn and Callie Torres belong to ABC/Shondaland. No profit intended.

Rating: PG. At least for now. There's bound to be some language and some adult situations.

Pairing: Callie/Erica

Summary: Erica is talked into letting a documentary television crew descend on Seattle Grace. While in her personal life, she's realizing a deepening

Comments

[coolembo]

LOL Cheesy soap opera here we go and there was a reality show on Johns Hopkins a year ago and it was called.... you guessed it right Hopkins.

[hectic1]

Yeah, I watched a couple of episodes of Hopkins. Despite loving most medical docu-dramas, I didn't much care for that show. But you called it, that was more or less the basis of the show in this story. Thanks for reading.

[sapphicwarrior]

why do I get the feeling that this Ian guy will be trouble for Callie and Erica? :(
Great update again, looking forward to the next one :D

[hectic1]

I think he's going to be trouble but not the kind you're thinking he's going to be. Or will he be? Hmmm... :)) See what I did there? Keep 'em guessing.

Thanks for the comments.

[hectic1]

I suppose there needs to be, huh? Well, the show didn't make sense in that context. They established them as friends who had a natural rapport, who spent a lot of time hanging out and talking, but once they made them a couple it was like they didn't talk at all about anything. It was weird. So I'm trying to take a logical, believable approach to their relationship. You know, where they can have a decent conversation or even have an argument without the whole relationship crashing down around them. Thanks for the comments.

I'm All In

[dianeb_047]

This story is such a nice read. It flows well and feels "real." It's just complicated enough to keep my interest piqued without spilling over into the melodramatic or angsty. The action fits nicely with dialogue and narrative, and it provides me with perfect mental images of what's going on. I can't wait to learn how this all plays out. (And, hey, if it does venture into the melodramatic, I can blame it on the TV show!)

Hooray for the proper spelling of a while, and great use of the word plucked.

Re: I'm All In

[hectic1]

Wow, what a nice compliment. Your feedback read like something a creative writing teacher might scrawl on the paper. Not that I ever took creative writing, but still... Very insightful and helpful. Thank you.

I was worried about this chapter a little. I thought it might be a little too much filler, a little too much set up, you know? It's reassuring to hear that it managed to hold your attention.

Melodrama. Bane of my existence. It's so easy to slip into, but isn't that the measure of good fiction, whether the writer can create conflict without resorting to melodrama? I'm afraid I went that route with Bulletproof, but it was so damn easy. Not to mention, fun and extremely cathartic. I'm going to try to stay clear of the melodrama as much as possible with this story, but since I've opened up the ex-fiance can of worms, we'll see how long that lasts. :))

Thanks for the kindness, I really appreciate it.

[hot_4_hahn]

Okay, so I finally found my way over here. A little angsty? Perhaps.

Callie unwittingly outing them was perfect. I loved ‘listening’ to the residents and nurses discuss the situation and Dr. McMichael’s potential reaction. How slightly embarrassing for Callie that she basically just announced her ‘girlfriend’ neglected to mention what one would presume is a vital piece of information about her new hospital. Perhaps, Callie’s just got another glimpse of that untouchable side of Erica.

Yet, I also appreciate how Callie is learning to both support and challenge Erica. She calls her out on her sullen mood in restaurant. But she also reassures her that she doesn’t have to be so hard on herself about the decisions and judgment calls she makes that run counter to Albright’s wishes.

And this…Erica groaned at the reaction. "See that," she said, pointing an accusing finger, "that is what I'm afraid of." was just perfect. This is Erica Hahn’s voice and I could explicitly see her in my mind’s eye. Perfect

[hectic1]

I've been so focused on that damn Addica story that I forgot what I'd written in this story and had to go back and read the chapter