Firefly - Like Space

[hereswith]

Title: Like Space
Rating: R
Disclaimer: The characters and settings referred to here are not mine, they belong to Joss. No infringement is intended and no profit is made.
Author's note: Apparently, prompts are my thing these days. This ficlet is for one at the ongoing Porn Battle, Mal/River and "stars". It's set well after the movie. Thanks to geek_mama_2 for

Comments

[geekmama]

Gah! You are amazing. I know I highlighted the whole thing before, but current fave lines...

she likes what she sees, how he reacts, the way he feels in her head and between her legs.

...and...

she brims with knowing, arches her neck, her spine, and moves on him, over him, a rise and fall and flow

It's so beautifully, sensually written, we're just there, with her, and yet it's not really explicit, just these little details and visions that leave one gasping.

And the end is stunning. I'm glad you used that for the title. Perfect.

[hereswith]

You're the sweetest, sincere thanks! Considering the challenge I wrote it for, it's probably not explicit enough, but you know me, and it's wonderful to hear that it works so well. I was inspired to change the title because of what you said :-)

[jenthegypsy]

You don't go there very often, but when you do you blow all other hot-het out of the waters. No one does smoke and mirrors like you do, old friend, and I'm more than happy to see you stretch those wings again. Your Mal and River are always absolutely pitch perfect, but this time even more so, as I clearly hear River in the narrative, which I absolutely love.

While I thrilled to the "Ain't gonna let you off that easy." back and forth (so much fun in the middle of so much heat), I found the ending to be pure poetry ~ suitable afterglow to one heck of a ride.

“River,” he says, before he’s inarticulate, and it starts then, comes on her from his stroking, from the rhythm, winds her tight and trembling, and when it’s finished, she collapses against him in a sticky-sweet tangle of limbs and hair and disassembled thoughts, white on black behind her lids, like stars. Like space.

*super hugs, darlin'*
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Please forgive the delayed comment. I've attempted on 3 different occasions and LJ has eaten every single one before I could

[hereswith]

How annoying of LJ! And I'm a little late, too, things are crazy stressful right now. Also, I will catch up on that other fic I'd missed, I promise.

*hugs you back* Thank you so much for your kind words! You know I love hearing what your favourite bits were, and I'm so happy you enjoyed this :-)

Always love what you write...

[obsidianagirl]

And this is no exception! It is just awesome.

Re: Always love what you write...

[hereswith]

Hi there! Thank you very much, and I do appreciate you reading and commenting.

[tarmenel]

this was easily the best porn, the best fic I've read in a good long while. Gorgeous. I loved this so much. ♥ You write wonderfully.

& silly, for believing he’s bad when he’s good, wrong when he’s right where he should be, inside her and so deep, all swallowed up.

♥♥

[hereswith]

I'm really happy you loved it, and that you liked that particular line :-) Thank you for stopping by to read and for your kind comments!

[hendercats]

You always write the prettiest porn! It's ... delicate? Your writing consistently has such lyric beauty, but when you write "hot" you completely blow me away because all that loveliness is right there causing the steam.

to chide him, silly, for believing he’s bad when he’s good, wrong when he’s right where he should be
Marvelous, slightly twisty phrasing - so perfectly inside her head.

she brims with knowing
I absolutely love this bit, love her knowing that he wants her.

a sticky-sweet tangle of limbs and hair and disassembled thoughts, white on black behind her lids, like stars. Like space.
And this is glorious. geekmama is absolutely right in her word choice - a stunning ending.

[hereswith]

What wonderful compliments, I'm so glad you think so! And you picked out your favourite lines. *beams* Thank you for the lovely feedback. ♥