Firefly - Truth Comes Out

[hereswith]

Title: Truth Comes Out
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: The characters and settings referred to here are not mine, they belong to Joss. No infringement is intended and no profit is made.
Summary: Night on Serenity and River is doing something she shouldn't. For luxuria_oceanus and the prompt "longing

Comments

[vialethe]

Oh my. You aren't off at all.

I love the little details - his shirt on backwards, Zoe saying he snores - and your phrasing, lovely as always - the words held up like warning signs, she scrambles into standing, She loosens her grip on rumpled clothing, on uncertainty.

And the whole premise is both naughty and adorable and what I wouldn't give to know what happens next...*happy sigh*

[hereswith]

I'm not sure myself, it could be that they were both too tired and collapsed in bed ;-) I'm very happy you loved the details and even more so that you thought I got them right. I struggled a bit with this, but hopefully it will be easier writing yours, now that I've got into it again. Thank you for the comment!

[hereswith]

Thank you! I'm glad you thought so :-)

[outinthestorm]

You are probably sick of my blathering, but I just love the way you write. It almost has a taste and texture, it is so fantastic.

he’s in his bed, not sleeping, his hands busy, and she knows what he does, she can feel what he feels.

*fans self*
Delicious!

[hereswith]

Sick of your blathering? My dear, never that. I truly appreciate your words and I'm very happy my writing comes across that way. Thanks so much. ♥

[pearlseed]

Oh yeah, geekmama was sweet to reassure you, lol! That said, ohmyWORD!

Not far off the banter, the sound of their voices, the choices they both made and how come they made them...I suppose you could have done better, but holy Toledo!

"His smile is odd, any anger faded, fuzzy at the edges. “That’s an awful lot to be asking. A man’s got needs.” This line is just lovely--it's Mal's voice and his acceptance of the way of the world, his acceptance of his place in it, his relationship with River and how it is fluid and proceeding. Done good!

As the saying goes... I'll be in my bunk.lol

[hereswith]

Thank you for commenting and for pointing out your favourite lines :-)

[garnigal]

Oh wonderful. Love this so much. So much love that I wish I'd thought of it. :)

[hereswith]

I'm delighted you enjoyed it that much. *g* Thanks for letting me know!