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Possession 2

Jul 08, 2010 09:58

Apparently post was too large, continued here. Part one: http://herewithstupid.livejournal.com/1619.html

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When Nick found them, the two men were standing out on the porch outside the shack, Keith leaning on the railing and sulkily looking over. Ellis stood next to him, hands shoved in his pockets awkwardly, but a look ( Read more... )

keith, ellis, l4d2, fanfiction, nick

Comments 7

wisecracks July 9 2010, 01:27:43 UTC

Is it bad i kept wondering what diseases Keith carries?

It was hot between the layer of awkwardness. And i don't care how Nick felt towards the end; Ellis moaning HIS name while coming was damn satisfying! Like, in yo' FACE, Jim-Bob! *ahem* The only thing i kinda still want was a conversation--in words or actions--between Nick and Ellis when they went back to bed. I dunno. Then again, after 3 years maybe they just have to fall asleep together for closure.

herewithstupid July 9 2010, 02:05:02 UTC

Many diseases silly, many many diseases. 8D

I think Nick just acknowledged he should have felt slightly bad simply because he took him to be a complete asshole without knowing the reasoning. Yknow? Too much effort to explain Dx

I debated putting that in there, or at the very least adding a litte something to the end when Ellis re-entered the bedroom. But... I was possibly getting a bit lazy >.> Just a bit.

wisecracks July 17 2010, 21:57:37 UTC

Aw, s'ok. Me complaining about laziness would be hypocritical.

Nick feels slightly bad but i'm glad Keith feels worse. I mean, wow, wrong way to go about keeping your friend. If i was Nick i woulda kicked his ass just once for possibly hurting El. My mind chose to add a shower and a cuddle anyway.

herewithstupid July 21 2010, 02:03:05 UTC

Aw, well, Keith didn't mean any harm. Let's not forget that this is the same guy that tried to make fireworks out of gasoline. (And it DID result in an epic threesome). And hey, it was either trying to replace Nick, or lighting him on fire. Nick could try to kill him back... but c'mon, this is fucking KEITH. He doesn't die.

Cuddle and shower is nice <3

disutansu July 24 2010, 02:49:54 UTC

Oh god, my brain just melted from the incredibly hot part in the beginning. I shouldn't, but... oh man. *covers face in embarrassment*

What I do love though is the conversation between Keith and Ellis afterward. Very deep and heavy and just slightly pained... Definitely pulled at my heart strings. Poor Keith. But I'm glad to read that both Nick and Keith are trying to meet each other in the middle, especially where Ellis is concerned. :D Shows how much they do care about him.

Very nice work and lol I fail at how long it took me to get around to it. OTL

herewithstupid July 24 2010, 03:00:48 UTC

Hooray! I'm glad someone else appreciated the conversation between those two. >.> I think most people were distracted by the threesome. I really liked how the talk between them came out and I thought I managed to get a lot of Keith's reasoning into a few short minutes of conversation. Cause, it's not like Keith's a complete ass, he's a good guy.

Meet each other in the middle? ELLIS WAS IN THE MIDDLE OF THEIR THREESOME SANDWITCH. Ah c wat u did thar.

disutansu July 24 2010, 03:11:54 UTC

As much as I do love reading sex scenes, I do love character interaction and getting inside the character's head and understanding the "why" behind their actions. I thought you did it very well, and Keith is perfectly human in feeling the way he did about the possibility of losing Ellis, perhaps the only important person in his life now.

... *DIES* Totally not what I meant. XDDD But um, okay I guess. XD