What a cool concept that Hermione is in another reality after being murdered. The magic or science in her current world is facinating. i didnt understand much any of it but it held my attention none the less. Point me to Fullmetal Alchemist please.
Sita: Oooh, I've never read Fullmetal Alchemist, so I know nothing about the fandom, but you managed to incorporate plenty of aspects and explanations without requiring a full knowledge of that. I like the idea of Hermione finding her way in a new world, and creating new magics/alchemies while she was at it. :D One small quibble - when you're writing long lists of things (like the names of the jewels in their brooches), you need to put commas in. Every time I had to stop and re-read the entire sentence to realize it was a list. Other than that, I liked this piece!
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below are a few links.
http://www.edwardelric.com/
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fullmetal_Alchemist
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Edward_Elric
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