Greensleves 1/?
anonymous
October 7 2009, 05:39:16 UTC
The first thing Alfred notices is that is not Arthur. This is some lion dressed to look as Arthur, but he is not fooled in the least. This is England; the British Empire, and it breaks Alfred’s heart because he’ll have to break this England all over again without Germany’s aid
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... OP didn't know what to say. OP still confused from the whole ordeal... Okay, I will tell you. It's good but it's confusing... Hopefully Author!Anon will still continue this and won't get discouraged by what OP says?
Writer!Anon
anonymous
October 11 2009, 15:15:11 UTC
Writer!anon apologizes to OP, but admits that she's trying to be a little sneaky. This writer!anon doesn't normally do sneaky, so she isn't sure how well she's doing it, but apologizes if its making the story difficult to read.
Re: Greensleeves 3/?
anonymous
October 11 2009, 10:00:57 UTC
Oh man, I like where this is going. It's good to see that you did not neglect to portray how alt!America affected the other nations. Aggressive!Canada is no longer just passive-aggressive. Can't wait to have alt!America know that England is planning to escape (hopefully he doesn't find out that Canada's involved D:). :)
Greensleves 4/?
anonymous
October 12 2009, 08:28:02 UTC
He was gone, oh dear God they were both gone. America forced himself not to panic, to try and keep the monster that was raging in check. But he should have known better, should have worked harder. He had a whole week, it had been a week since England, the charade that looked like his Arthur, had mysteriously appeared, and America hadn’t taken the fucking time to break him! Should have fucked him harder, shouldn’t have stopped beating him when he blacked out. A whole week full of opportunity and it was completely wasted. He’d thought he’d had more time
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Re: Greensleves 4/?
anonymous
October 12 2009, 08:42:13 UTC
This is so interesting I can't wait to see what happens next, kinda hoping the Commonwealth will be brought into this, that would be interesting cause with no more England and Canada being a 'state' I wonder what happened to them
Greensleeves 5/?
anonymous
October 14 2009, 05:35:20 UTC
“One five. You aren’t giving him the credit he deserves.” Prussia placed the card face down on the table, stacking it in front of a rather small pile of face down cards
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Re: Greensleeves 5/?
anonymous
October 14 2009, 09:01:16 UTC
Oh, this is really interesting. I love the tension in this part and how you showed Prussia's usual self in an unpleasant light (we love his awesomeness so much that we often forget the flip side). Just one criticism, it's a bit hard to tell who's speaking at times.
ReCaptcha: trotsky California Is Russia going to team up with America? XD Oh boy.
OP is confused... Are they playing poker or what? OP wants to know what they are playing~ :) But this chapter is good (If OP understand what they play that is).
Not writer!anon here, but I believe they're playing Cheat, also called Bullshit. You deal out the whole deck and then each player lays some of their cards face down in the middle and declares what they've put down. It's up to the other players to decide if it's the truth or else they call "cheat" or "bullshit" or whatever. If they guess wrong, they person who guessed has to pick up the pile of all the cards that have been put down so far, if they guess right, the player who got called out has pick up the pile.
To writer!anon, I'm very intrigued by where you're going with this and I'm really glad you've brought other characters into it as well.
Re: Greensleeves 5/?
anonymous
October 14 2009, 20:01:13 UTC
This anon still can't completely see the story but will follow due to interest. Hope that some explanations or flashbacks might appear soon. This anon can see the charm of leaving readers confused and wondering, but I do hope for some explanations in a few chapters from now.
I encurage writer anon to continue I'm looking forward to see what's happening! Writer anon we support you.
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Just one criticism, it's a bit hard to tell who's speaking at times.
ReCaptcha: trotsky California
Is Russia going to team up with America? XD Oh boy.
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But this chapter is good (If OP understand what they play that is).
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To writer!anon, I'm very intrigued by where you're going with this and I'm really glad you've brought other characters into it as well.
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http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/10960.html?thread=20724688#t20724688
Thank you kind anon for explaining the game for this writer!anon, who should have done it but totally did not think about it. Thank you so much!!
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I encurage writer anon to continue I'm looking forward to see what's happening! Writer anon we support you.
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And um, I'm surprised that others are so confused... I'm following it fine. :)
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