Re: Drinking Buddies Part 4/4
anonymous
April 6 2010, 00:35:04 UTC
He pulled out and Toris lay shaking there for a moment, his back beaded with cold sweat, his skin tingling as he whimpered with frustration. “Vanya, please...” he begged, tears pricking his eyes
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Re: Drinking Buddies Part 4/4
anonymous
April 6 2010, 02:24:58 UTC
And so goes the unfortunate implications of Lithuania's name.... (Toris is a name for dogs, but I'm sure you already knew that.)
I liked the way you wrote it. I can't say much for the content because I don't like prompts like these, but you filled it very well. One grammar mistake was when Lithuania says his name is Lietuvos. That would be true only if he said Lietuvos respublika. I hope I spelled it right. Left alone, the correct case is Lietuva. But don't worry because Lithuanian is sorta hard to get right away due to the cases. ^__^ Otherwise, I think you showed Russia's partial insanity and Liet's drinking habits realistically. I see Liet as the kind of guy who wouldn't drink very often, too.
*Hugs Liet and helps him come when Russia's not looking* Sorry, I just love this boy so much. I could never leave him like that.
Recaptcha: kolker evacuated - That's right, recaptcha! Remove Russia from the premises so I can help Liet come
Re: Drinking Buddies Part 4/4
anonymous
April 8 2010, 23:58:21 UTC
I agree with the previous anon about Liet's drinking habits. That's a nice little character detail, right there.
Now, I do like prompts like these, and I have to say that it was the last section that really made it. Lithuania was a bit OC to me at points, even with the alcohol, though he had to be for the kinks you chose to focus on - it threw me a little, but all was forgotten in the face of that orgasm denial. The last three paragraphs specifically were full of such delicious condescension, and the head tilt and the image of Lithuania curled up on the floor, desperately aroused and increasingly ashamed as he sobers up, are so. fucking. attractive. So, yeah. You got my motor running. Thank you, anon!
"Russia forces Lithuania to drink vodka, Lithuania gets drunk and Russia takes advantage of him."
It's a really old request, I think, so OP, if you're still here, I hope you like.
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I liked the way you wrote it. I can't say much for the content because I don't like prompts like these, but you filled it very well. One grammar mistake was when Lithuania says his name is Lietuvos. That would be true only if he said Lietuvos respublika. I hope I spelled it right. Left alone, the correct case is Lietuva. But don't worry because Lithuanian is sorta hard to get right away due to the cases. ^__^ Otherwise, I think you showed Russia's partial insanity and Liet's drinking habits realistically. I see Liet as the kind of guy who wouldn't drink very often, too.
*Hugs Liet and helps him come when Russia's not looking* Sorry, I just love this boy so much. I could never leave him like that.
Recaptcha: kolker evacuated - That's right, recaptcha! Remove Russia from the premises so I can help Liet come
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Now, I do like prompts like these, and I have to say that it was the last section that really made it. Lithuania was a bit OC to me at points, even with the alcohol, though he had to be for the kinks you chose to focus on - it threw me a little, but all was forgotten in the face of that orgasm denial. The last three paragraphs specifically were full of such delicious condescension, and the head tilt and the image of Lithuania curled up on the floor, desperately aroused and increasingly ashamed as he sobers up, are so. fucking. attractive.
So, yeah. You got my motor running. Thank you, anon!
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