America and England are in good relationship over the years, but both of them never... make love as opposed to what every nations said.
So, one day, America saw something unsettling about England... and snaps. He go to England and show him that he is 'his'. After that, he kept show England that he is 'his' (Or I should say, rape him). After a while, England become more subdued and never once raise his voice on America or even insult America's ideas. This make other nations started to investigate... and tried to find out what is wrong with England. What happened next is up to Anon! And, it didn't need to be exactly like what this OP said either.
Bonus: America always have sadistic tendencies ever since his childhood. SUPER BONUS: America discovers England's magical book and is using magic to make England his... FOREVER.
Something Unforgivable [1/?]
anonymous
June 1 2010, 03:36:49 UTC
Alfred has grown tired of this.
Tired of the mockery, the whispers, of Francis' knowing looks as he leaves Arthur's chambers. For none of the other nations seem to understand that he shares nothing more with Arthur than camaraderie, and occasionally a hamburger and a cup of tea. None understand that they're merely friends, allies. That they've never fucked.
Much as Alfred would like to, and he's sure Arthur wants it too, though he'd never admit it.
It all comes to a head at a meeting one night, when Arthur practically ignores him, ignores his demands and his opinions and, worse still, refuses to do what Alfred says. Alfred loves his power almost as much as he loves his hamburgers, and Arthur, the smarmy bastard, has never gotten used to the fact that Alfred is stronger. That Alfred wonBut it's after the meeting that the other foot drops. Outside in the hall, Alfred nearly collides with Ivan. The vast nation's bulk nearly obscures the other man behind him, pressed almost flush against the wall, but not so much that Alfred can't
( ... )
Something Unforgivable [2/?]
anonymous
June 1 2010, 03:38:58 UTC
Outside on a balcony, Alfred breathes in the scent of pine, but his blood refuses to cool, his heart to stop pounding so forcefully against its cage
( ... )
Something Unforgivable [3/3]
anonymous
June 1 2010, 03:42:42 UTC
After a while, Arthur becomes more subdued, submissive. He barely speaks at meetings, never shouts at Alfred or even disputes his suggestions. He's even civil to Francis, and that worries everyone.
It's Francis himself who suggests an investigation and, for once, everyone agrees. Toris is drafted to take up post in Arthur's closet, for the Englishman has been spending most of his time shut up in his rooms.
Late that night, Toris runs to the others, out of breath and panting. They listen to his jumbled report with mixed reactions.
“I, like, totally knew it!” Feliks cries with obvious relish.
“Invading Arthur is my job,” Francis objects, “though I can't deny Alfred the pleasure
( ... )
Re: Something Unforgivable [3/3]
anonymous
June 1 2010, 06:04:58 UTC
I find it strange that everyone else took it so 'eh their just doing it' despite the fact that it would look so much like rape since it is and toris being in ivans care for some of his life would know what a person traumatized looks like. That kinda killed the entire thing for me. ;.;
Re: Something Unforgivable [3/3]
anonymous
June 1 2010, 08:16:44 UTC
I agree; it was... like a balloon being deflated all too quickly. The 1st part showed promise, if a little unclear. Good try, Author!Anon, but take the time to properly flesh out your characters and their reactions. We barely get a glimpse at Arthur's thought process through it all.
Just some crit; hope you keep writing cuz practice makes perfect, and yandere!America writers are always tops :).
Author!non, you done an awesome job on this... OP is speechless as she read this. ovo She hoped she's not too late in giving comments since yours are too awesome~ C:
Although I'm confused on why Arthur didn't scream when Alfred come to him for the first time...
So, one day, America saw something unsettling about England... and snaps. He go to England and show him that he is 'his'. After that, he kept show England that he is 'his' (Or I should say, rape him). After a while, England become more subdued and never once raise his voice on America or even insult America's ideas. This make other nations started to investigate... and tried to find out what is wrong with England. What happened next is up to Anon! And, it didn't need to be exactly like what this OP said either.
Bonus: America always have sadistic tendencies ever since his childhood.
SUPER BONUS: America discovers England's magical book and is using magic to make England his... FOREVER.
Reply
Tired of the mockery, the whispers, of Francis' knowing looks as he leaves Arthur's chambers. For none of the other nations seem to understand that he shares nothing more with Arthur than camaraderie, and occasionally a hamburger and a cup of tea. None understand that they're merely friends, allies. That they've never fucked.
Much as Alfred would like to, and he's sure Arthur wants it too, though he'd never admit it.
It all comes to a head at a meeting one night, when Arthur practically ignores him, ignores his demands and his opinions and, worse still, refuses to do what Alfred says. Alfred loves his power almost as much as he loves his hamburgers, and Arthur, the smarmy bastard, has never gotten used to the fact that Alfred is stronger. That Alfred wonBut it's after the meeting that the other foot drops. Outside in the hall, Alfred nearly collides with Ivan. The vast nation's bulk nearly obscures the other man behind him, pressed almost flush against the wall, but not so much that Alfred can't ( ... )
Reply
Reply
Reply
It's Francis himself who suggests an investigation and, for once, everyone agrees. Toris is drafted to take up post in Arthur's closet, for the Englishman has been spending most of his time shut up in his rooms.
Late that night, Toris runs to the others, out of breath and panting. They listen to his jumbled report with mixed reactions.
“I, like, totally knew it!” Feliks cries with obvious relish.
“Invading Arthur is my job,” Francis objects, “though I can't deny Alfred the pleasure ( ... )
Reply
Reply
Just some crit; hope you keep writing cuz practice makes perfect, and yandere!America writers are always tops :).
Reply
Although I'm confused on why Arthur didn't scream when Alfred come to him for the first time...
Reply
Leave a comment