Nations and OC!Nations
anonymous
May 10 2010, 15:56:43 UTC
I want to read about your versions of nations who haven't appeared in Hetalia yet, interacting with canon characters. I want the point of the story to be the relationship between the OC!nation and the canon!nation, doesn't matter if it is a historical thing or not.
Hello there, this was really enjoyable to read, especially with the references to the Arab culture and the Ottoman influence *is in love with Ottoman history even before hetalia.*
But, as much as I hate to criticize, I feel it's my duty to do so since I'm Arabian myself, so when Sadiq says: 'La Afham?' It sounds a bit wrong in this situation, yes, it does mean 'don't understand', but that only applies in the first person case, like, if Sadiq talked about himself not understanding it would be right, but if he is speaking to a girl, then it would be more accurate to say: 'Ala Tafhameen?' or 'Alam Tafhami?' which means 'don't you understand (female)?', though I prefer the second one since the first one is more fit for scolding.
I'm really sorry to nitpick on you and your wonderful fill, but I really liked it and want it to be perfect, so if you're planning to de-anon in the future you can correct it.
*Facepalms* Arabian!anon again
anonymous
May 16 2010, 09:31:00 UTC
I failed to notice the big, capitalized TYPO, I'm sorry, but the correction I gave is still right, but it's still more right to say : 'Afahemti?' or 'Fahemti?' which mean 'did you understand?' rather than 'Afham', because he is 1) addressing a girl, 2) he sounds like he's talking in first person. And again, both corrections in the above comment and this one are right and don't change the meaning, I just wanted to be more literal.
I'm really, really sorry for the fail, but I was very excited to help in improving this great fill, and I am in a hurry (I have to go to the hospital..) and don't have the time to revise and check, I apologize :(.
No problem~! I'm happy that my help was appreciated. :)
Don't worry about it, I know Arabic can be so complicated and the grammar is unbearable, I personally know many foreigners who lived here for years and still speak in broken Arabic, so no harm is made, and I really squealed in delight that someone even tried.
And your story is so amazing so I feel honored for trying to make it perfect.
Acadie [Drabbly Microfill]
anonymous
June 2 2010, 02:30:03 UTC
Well, this took a bazillion years longer than it should of . And even then, it’s just a drabble. orz So, um, please forgive any historical inaccuracies, some liberties were taken, etc.
1604 France finds the girl curled up in the storage hold. She is curled into a ball, dressed all in white with her blonde hair spread around her. France can tell she is like him, a Nation personified, but he his at a loss as to where she is. He felt her appearance, but he has no felt any shift in the world’s boarders
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Re: Acadie [Drabbly Microfill]
anonymous
June 3 2010, 05:14:43 UTC
Woo, Acadia~!
It's super-exciting to see others' head canon about him/her. :D Mine's different, and this is an intriguing way of looking at her. Looking forward to more drabbles!
Acadie [Drabbles]
anonymous
June 29 2010, 21:58:28 UTC
These are for you, NovaScotian!Anon. Enjoy.
1607Acadia watches as the colonists - her people- pack their belongings and supplies onto the ship. She glances down at the blond boy who stands beside her
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Re: Acadie [Drabbles]
anonymous
July 5 2010, 22:18:31 UTC
Whoop, more Acadia! :D
Canada shakes his head. “No, no, I don’t mind sharing. I’ve got a lot of land, you know? It gets lonely, sometimes.”
I dawww'ed. ^^; I feel like I shouldn't, because of the way the region was batted back and forth between the British and French, but it was adorable anyway. Colonies have got to stick together, amirite? And Natives are already sharing land with him, what's one more nation? 8D *shot*
Hmm, this is kind of reminding me of how I view the old Judea - a diaspora nation without land - and makes me wonder if you count Nova Scotia et al post 1713 as separate colonies or just part of Canada. Guess I'll find out next update, eh? :)
Anyway, glad you're back, I'm just sorry it took me so long to find your update. ^^; *gives encouraging hugs*
No human names please.
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But, as much as I hate to criticize, I feel it's my duty to do so since I'm Arabian myself, so when Sadiq says:
'La Afham?'
It sounds a bit wrong in this situation, yes, it does mean 'don't understand', but that only applies in the first person case, like, if Sadiq talked about himself not understanding it would be right, but if he is speaking to a girl, then it would be more accurate to say: 'Ala Tafhameen?' or 'Alam Tafhami?' which means 'don't you understand (female)?', though I prefer the second one since the first one is more fit for scolding.
I'm really sorry to nitpick on you and your wonderful fill, but I really liked it and want it to be perfect, so if you're planning to de-anon in the future you can correct it.
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I'm really, really sorry for the fail, but I was very excited to help in improving this great fill, and I am in a hurry (I have to go to the hospital..) and don't have the time to revise and check, I apologize :(.
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I AM SO HAPPY YOU EXIST
My Arabic is SO bad like you wouldn't believe (and I wrote the story at 4am or so) so your corrections are hiiiighly appreciated XD
That aside, no worries. And thanks for enjoying the story!
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Don't worry about it, I know Arabic can be so complicated and the grammar is unbearable, I personally know many foreigners who lived here for years and still speak in broken Arabic, so no harm is made, and I really squealed in delight that someone even tried.
And your story is so amazing so I feel honored for trying to make it perfect.
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France finds the girl curled up in the storage hold. She is curled into a ball, dressed all in white with her blonde hair spread around her. France can tell she is like him, a Nation personified, but he his at a loss as to where she is. He felt her appearance, but he has no felt any shift in the world’s boarders ( ... )
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More please? I'm particularly interested in what happens to her during the Expulsion.
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Aaaaall riiighty then. I will get working on that. Yay, more drabbles~ Fffft.
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It's super-exciting to see others' head canon about him/her. :D Mine's different, and this is an intriguing way of looking at her. Looking forward to more drabbles!
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1607Acadia watches as the colonists - her people- pack their belongings and supplies onto the ship. She glances down at the blond boy who stands beside her ( ... )
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This was awesome! I loved the part with Alfred being happy that Acadia would be cooking and not England, that made me laugh. You have my love, anon!
Really, captcha? You want me to do a human!check on my PS3? *eyeroll*
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No one likes England's cooking. XD Yay, I got someone's love. And with a DRABBLY THING, of all things. XD
I was worried you had died. Thank you for not being dead. lol, wut
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Canada shakes his head. “No, no, I don’t mind sharing. I’ve got a lot of land, you know? It gets lonely, sometimes.”
I dawww'ed. ^^; I feel like I shouldn't, because of the way the region was batted back and forth between the British and French, but it was adorable anyway. Colonies have got to stick together, amirite? And Natives are already sharing land with him, what's one more nation? 8D *shot*
Hmm, this is kind of reminding me of how I view the old Judea - a diaspora nation without land - and makes me wonder if you count Nova Scotia et al post 1713 as separate colonies or just part of Canada. Guess I'll find out next update, eh? :)
Anyway, glad you're back, I'm just sorry it took me so long to find your update. ^^; *gives encouraging hugs*
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