Sweet Child Of mine- Prolog
anonymous
June 13 2010, 06:01:09 UTC
So there you go. I said Sunday and Sunday it is. Prolog and a first chapter, without a beta, in spite of my will- no one will take it…. so, sorry for any mistakes in grammar, spelling or typos
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Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 3 (2/4)
anonymous
June 25 2010, 05:04:12 UTC
Tomasz surely didn't feel like any of the above as he was dragged about, too shocked, and slightly too scared to even register what just happened. He found himself thrown into a big meeting room, and he had barely gotten the time to balance himself when the melodramatic man barged in behind him and called: "Gentlemen- I present you our new speaker
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Sweet Child Of mine- 3 (2/4)
anonymous
June 25 2010, 05:05:13 UTC
And then the eyes disappeared. He shook himself a bit. He was on the floor, by the entrance of the meeting room. A bunch loud of party members he had only known by the type of coffee they liked looked at him - and at each other - worriedly
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Sweet Child Of mine- 3 (4/4)
anonymous
June 25 2010, 05:07:55 UTC
Tomasz just shook his head for a "no". Feliks Łukasiewicz…who was he, really? Did he have any connection to his parents? He could never have mistaken those eyes. He had to find out. His heart swelled with joy, and he could feel something he thought he let go of long ago arise within him- the hope to find his parents
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Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 3 (4/4)
anonymous
June 25 2010, 05:17:35 UTC
I really like this! I can tell a lot of effort goes into this, and the result is great! You really know how to create characters, too. Tomasz is great!
Re: Sweet Child Of mine- 3 (4/4)
anonymous
June 25 2010, 06:33:53 UTC
Poor Feliks. ;-; You know, thinking about it, it's kinda ironic he said earlier in part 1 he wanted to help his motherland. Now he's getting his chance, but will he find out it's not just his motherland, but his mother?
ReCaptcha: insole because; yes, ReCaptcha, there will probably be a lot of pacing and wearing out of shoes.
Sweet Child Of mine- 4 (2/6)
anonymous
July 12 2010, 19:56:36 UTC
He usually told them it was his nephew and got away with only a bit of amusement, but the truth was that he had a whole fat album of pictures, full to the brim. It was a good way to help quiet his heart from time to time when thoughts about Tomasz rose. He knew that unlike him, Poland got on better with only memories - only thinking, never looking back. But he… he needed the pictures. He needed to see the long-past smiles, the cries, so he could believe it wasn't just a nice, long-since-passed dream, or a thing happened to someone else
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Sweet Child Of mine- 4 (3/6)
anonymous
July 12 2010, 20:00:35 UTC
Poland began crying again. It took ten good minutes to calm him down again so he would be able to talk clearly enough to be understood. Toris sat quietly during the whole story. How six months ago Poland sow their son's name on the employee list, the panic, telling a half-true story to one confused prime minister, who said there are a lot of people named "Tomasz Firely" out there
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Sweet Child Of mine- 4 (5/6)
anonymous
July 12 2010, 20:04:12 UTC
Their modern society was so much snottier, so much more demanding and stressing. Being nations was harder to hide than ever. Every few years they need to change living places, so people won't notice they just didn’t age, and exchange the birthdates in their identifications so they would make sense. They couldn't keep in touch with humans save for their bosses and important people, so that relatives and friends wouldn’t suspect a thing. There were only a few doctors around the world to treat them, because the governments had become so much more protective of them. Everything about them had become top-secret material
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and thenks. ^____^ for the comment, too, that is.
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I look forward to updates
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can't wait for the next part!
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ReCaptcha: insole because; yes, ReCaptcha, there will probably be a lot of pacing and wearing out of shoes.
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