Re: Porphyria's Lover [2/3]
anonymous
July 29 2010, 21:35:57 UTC
America growled with annoyance. England always had something smart to say. Always. There was not a day gone by in which he had not made some cutting, sarcastic remark at him
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Re: Porphyria's Lover [2/3]
anonymous
July 30 2010, 05:52:51 UTC
I-I dont have a necro kink like at all but this made me want to know whether England wakes up (they are nations so...) and America re-poisons him (does he even remember??) or if s/t else happens..
That being said America's inner thoughts were very dark and hit my yandere!america just right. This was so well written and so scary ;^; I loved it<3
I didn't really freak out because their nations (so in my headcanon they dont really die).
injecting pupils...captcha seriously things should not be injected there like ew = =;
Re: Porphyria's Lover [3/3]
anonymous
July 29 2010, 21:38:37 UTC
It was not good enough. America did not know why he was still frustrated. He pounded against flesh like dough and fucked him hard into the carpet but his lust felt unquenchable and England had nothing to suggest and nothing to say. When he finally did come, and when his come spilled out and onto his carpet as he withdrew, he collapsed on top of England’s body, breathing deeply, exhausted but wanting more.
America felt as though he had sparked a sudden hunger for something that he could never completely sate. If only he knew what it was that he was missing. Well, he reasoned, there was always tomorrow night.
Wow. I really don't know what to say to this anon...
It was very well written, too well if the sick feelig in my stomach is any indication. I was hoping for England to awake from the state of death but this is a much more morbid end to a taboo fill.
I figure others are not reading this because of the sickly nature of this prompt and for once I think they were right. Thanks for writing this chillng piece and the nightmares to come.
Re: Porphyria's Lover [3/3]
anonymous
July 30 2010, 05:29:49 UTC
I have to agree with the anon above. That chillingly well-written- I got a really good sense of death here. I have no idea if you subscribe to the headcanon that says Nations come back after death, so I don't know if America's keeping the body for future pleasures, or if he's going to poison and repeat. At this point, I don't think I want to know.
Also, I liked that America was sort of but not really oblivious to the wrongness of the situation- that he's never going to get what he wants this way.
Re: Porphyria's Lover [3/3]
anonymous
July 30 2010, 06:08:37 UTC
You know, despite the fact that America has killed his loved one (or lover, even?), and despite the focus on one of the greatest sexual taboos, I was most disturbed by this section:
America let go and the head lolled to the side uselessly. England reminded him of a rabbit; one of the many that had died on him when he was young.
He patted the side of England’s head as though it were fluffy down.
It's just that ... He describes England as reminding him of a rabbit, then immediately pets him like one. That's somehow MORE disturbing than the rest, where after innocently exploring his body, he then proceeds to violate his corpse. OTL
And of course the ambiguity of the ending is creepy, too. Does he continue to keep and violate the corpse for some time as it rots, or does he continue killing England every time he reanimates and then repeat the same process night after night? And do we want to know? XD
Very cool title, by the way. This was a disturbing read, but still very interesting.
Sorry for the late reply here... but, oh damn Anon, you... uh... how should I put this in a way that won't sound creepy? Well, even if it was Necro... that was damn hot. Or shall I say cold?
Eh, either way, thank you so so so much for filling! It was chilling and creepy. I love it <3
To save some time I'm going to agree with all the other Anon's and what they've said. Although, I actually do have a Necro kink (can't do it in real life though, that would require a stick) and this fill just made glad that I do have it and also love creepy/chilling things.
OP sounds way to excited in comparison to other Anons.
Re: Porphyria's Lover [1/2]
anonymous
July 30 2010, 05:55:45 UTC
*comes back to comment on this after reread first chapter...* The rabbits...Ill assume it was either them dieing of old age or baby!america to strong to control but innocent of crime nonthe less...;A;A;
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That being said America's inner thoughts were very dark and hit my yandere!america just right. This was so well written and so scary ;^; I loved it<3
I didn't really freak out because their nations (so in my headcanon they dont really die).
injecting pupils...captcha seriously things should not be injected there like ew = =;
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It was not good enough. America did not know why he was still frustrated. He pounded against flesh like dough and fucked him hard into the carpet but his lust felt unquenchable and England had nothing to suggest and nothing to say. When he finally did come, and when his come spilled out and onto his carpet as he withdrew, he collapsed on top of England’s body, breathing deeply, exhausted but wanting more.
America felt as though he had sparked a sudden hunger for something that he could never completely sate. If only he knew what it was that he was missing. Well, he reasoned, there was always tomorrow night.
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It was very well written, too well if the sick feelig in my stomach is any indication. I was hoping for England to awake from the state of death but this is a much more morbid end to a taboo fill.
I figure others are not reading this because of the sickly nature of this prompt and for once I think they were right. Thanks for writing this chillng piece and the nightmares to come.
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Also, I liked that America was sort of but not really oblivious to the wrongness of the situation- that he's never going to get what he wants this way.
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America let go and the head lolled to the side uselessly. England reminded him of a rabbit; one of the many that had died on him when he was young.
He patted the side of England’s head as though it were fluffy down.
It's just that ... He describes England as reminding him of a rabbit, then immediately pets him like one. That's somehow MORE disturbing than the rest, where after innocently exploring his body, he then proceeds to violate his corpse. OTL
And of course the ambiguity of the ending is creepy, too. Does he continue to keep and violate the corpse for some time as it rots, or does he continue killing England every time he reanimates and then repeat the same process night after night? And do we want to know? XD
Very cool title, by the way. This was a disturbing read, but still very interesting.
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Well, even if it was Necro... that was damn hot. Or shall I say cold?
Eh, either way, thank you so so so much for filling! It was chilling and creepy. I love it <3
To save some time I'm going to agree with all the other Anon's and what they've said.
Although, I actually do have a Necro kink (can't do it in real life though, that would require a stick) and this fill just made glad that I do have it and also love creepy/chilling things.
OP sounds way to excited in comparison to other Anons.
In a nutshell: I love you, Author.
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The rabbits...Ill assume it was either them dieing of old age or baby!america to strong to control but innocent of crime nonthe less...;A;A;
I love dark psychology type fics. <3
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